1. Drafting  Finish your rough draft o Be sure you have an o introduction where you mention conflict o body paragraphs with a well-developed story of the conflict in your life with lots of specific details o a conclusion that explains how this conflict changed you (the lesson you learned).  Submit once to see where you are

2. Revising-Adding Transitions  Add a transition word to each of the five paragraphs (near beginning or near the end of the paragraph)  Use your Transition List from your Toolbox to make sure the transitions are STRONG and POWERFUL. Do not use these: first, next, then, finally.  Highlight the transition words.

3. Revising-Improving Word Choice  Re-read your essay  Highlight drop-dead words (over used, lost meaning, BORING)  Use your Toolbox or a thesaurus to replace the words with a stronger, more powerful, more descriptive word!

4. Drop Dead Words AdverbsVerbsAdjectivesNouns/Prono uns VeryLike/loveFunIt ReallyWalkCool/aweso me Stuff NextSaidGood/greatFriend Go/wentPrettyHome Ugly Mad Bad Sad

5. Coordinate Adjectives  2 adjectives working together equally  Can switch the order  Are always separated by a comma Ex: The musician played a beautiful, haunting melody. YOUR JOB: Add at least one pair of coordinate adjectives to your essay. Circle your coordinate adjectives.

6. Hierarchal adjectives  Work together in a particular order  Order can’t be switched  No comma necessary  Ex: I put the donuts inside the wooden bread box.

7. Revising-Adding an Appositive  Appositive- A word or phrase that renames a noun or pronoun A comma comes before and after appositives An appositive can be removed & sentence will still make sense Ex. Interactive video games, Wii Fit and Just Dance, are being used in P.E. classes across the nation. The book was written by Jim Murphy, author of 30 non-fiction texts. Add an appositive to your essay. Underline it.

8. Revising- Improving Style  Simile: I was swept along in the crowd like a leaf in a windstorm.  Metaphor: I became a rock kicked along by the crowd down the street.  Personification : Enthusiasm for P.E. would rocket sky-high!  Hyperbole: The wind swept through DeKoven Street like a typhoon. YOUR JOB: Add one sentence that contains figurative language to your essay.

9. Revising- Elaborating  Write more=Higher score  Add examples, specific details, adjectives, adverbs, appositives, more figurative language. Your job: Add something to each of your five paragraphs to improve the content of the paragraph.

10. Edit  Reread your essay  Run Spell Check  Use MyEditor and make corrections  Submit