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1 Five Ways to Cut the Clutter Source: Richard Nordquist

2 "I believe more in the scissors than I do in the pencil." --Truman Capote

3 1) Use Active Verbs Whenever possible, make the subject of a sentence do something. subject Wordy: The grant proposals were reviewed by the students. Revised: The students reviewed the grant proposals.

4 2) Don't Try to Show Off As Leonardo da Vinci observed, "Simplicity is the ultimate sophistication." Don't presume that big words or lengthy phrases will impress your readers: often the simplest word is the best. Wordy: At this moment in time, students who are matriculating through high school should be empowered to participate in the voting process. Revised: High school students should have the right to vote.

5 3) Cut Empty Phrases… – all things being equal –all things considered –as a matter of fact –as far as I am concerned –at the end of the day –at the present time –due to the fact that –for all intents and purposes –for the most part –for the purpose of –in a manner of speaking –in my opinion –in the event of –in the final analysis –it seems that –the point that I am trying to make –type of –what I am trying to say –what I want to make clear

6 3) …including clichés – big fish in a small pond –who I am today –don‘t judge a book by its cover –life has its ups and down

7 Wordy: All things being equal, what I am trying to say is that in my opinion all students should, in the final analysis, have the right to vote for all intents and purposes. Revised: Students should have the right to vote.

8 4) Avoid Using Noun Forms of Verbs The fancy name for this process is "excessive nominalization." Our advice: don't name something when you can show it instead. Wordy: The presentation of the arguments by the students was convincing. Revised: The students presented their arguments convincingly. Or... The students argued convincingly.

9 5) Replace Vague Nouns Replace vague nouns (such as area, aspect, case, factor, manner, situation, something, thing, type, and way) with more specific words--or eliminate them altogether. Wordy: After reading several things in the area of psychology-type subjects, I decided to put myself in a situation where I might change my major. Revised: After reading several psychology books, I decided to change my major.


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