1. C/C Writing Lesson 5: Elaboration

2. I. Introduction A. Background B. Bridge C. Thesis—both subjects and the three points II. C/C Body Paragraphs A. Topic sentence B. Evidence for Subject 1

3. C. Elaboration on Evidence for Subject 1 1. MIGHT include expanding on the evidence with more evidence, OR 2. It MIGHT include expanding on the evidence in your own words Example: Clothing from the Paleolithic era tended to be crude while the garments of the Neolithic era were more refined. The Paleolithic people sewed natural materials in order to make outfits (Smith 1). The use of a sewing needle, while inventive, was a time-consuming task (Jones 20). Example: Clothing from the Paleolithic era tended to be crude while the garments of the Neolithic era were more refined. The Paleolithic people sewed natural materials in order to make outfits (Smith 1). The use of a sewing needle, while inventive, was a time-consuming task (Jones 20). The resulting clothes were quite basic, although they were functional.

4. D. Appropriate C/C transition E. Evidence for Subject 2 F. Elaboration on Subject 2’s evidence

5. 1. You can give more evidence, BUT you NEED to expand on the comparison 2. That MIGHT mean making an argument a. If a contrast: which is better and why? 3. That MIGHT include discussing the cause and/or effect of the similarity or difference. a. WHY are the subjects similar/different with this point? b. What EFFECTS did the difference have on the two subjects? 4. That MIGHT mean doing something else.

6. Partner activity 1. Look at the example body paragraphs. 2. How does the writer elaborate on the comparison? Which tactic from the notes we just took does the writer use? **Your choices are under big “F” from the notes