1. Starter:
What are the techniques used in writing to describe? Create a list or a brainstorm in your book of all the techniques you can remember.

2. Success Criteria:
Used at least three language techniques and three structure techniques in a piece of descriptive writing.
Learning Objective:
To review planning techniques for description.
To be able to use language and structure techniques for effect.
Plenary:
Re-view.

3. P Personification O Onomatopoeia Powerful Language S Senses x 5 M
Remembering the descriptive techniques. P O S M A R
Personification
Onomatopoeia
Powerful Language
Senses x 5
Metaphors
Alliteration
Repetition
Similes

4. So, how did you do...? The 5 senses Sight Sound Smell Taste Touch
A good piece of descriptive writing should include
Adjectives
Powerful verbs
Alliteration
Onomatopoeia
Imagery
Similes
Metaphors
personification
The 5 senses
Sight
Sound
Smell
Taste
Touch
Different types of sentences: one word sentence, simple, compound complex.

5. Planning a description – the walk through
Focus
Sights
Taste
Sounds
Smells
Feel/touch
Approaching the camp
“this is what a million people looks like”
At the fence
(photos 1,2,3)
As Solomon looks through the fence and sees Jessie
As Solomon is assaulted by the guard
As Jessie is dragged away.

6. Watching the film
We will now watch Maddy, Solomon and Danny as they approach the refugee camp.
Take notes on your planning sheet as we watch.
We will watch the scene a couple of times.
You are taking notes to describe the camp in a magazine article.
Watch from them coming out of the hilicopter up until they pull Solomon away from the fence.

7. Refining your planning
Choose the best description of sight – circle it. Now doe the same for taste, smell, sound and feel. You should have 5 boxes circled.
Now, your aim is to choose the three best boxes in each row.
Each row represents a paragraph.
You do not need to describe every sense in every paragraph.
However, you do need to describe all the senses at sometime through out the piece.

8.  Planning a description – the walk through Focus Sights Taste Sounds
Smells
Feel/touch
Approaching the camp
“this is what a million people looks like”
At the fence
(photos 1,2,3)
As Solomon looks through the fence and sees Jessie
As Solomon is assaulted by the guard
As Jessie is dragged away. 

9. X Planning a description – the walk through Focus Sights Taste Sounds
Smells
Feel/touch
Approaching the camp
“this is what a million people looks like”
At the fence
(photos 1,2,3)
As Solomon looks through the fence and sees Jessie
As Solomon is assaulted by the guard
As Jessie is dragged away. X

10. Now you try...
Imagine you are a journalist, you are trying to describe to the readers in Australia what the refugee camp is like.
Using your notes from the planning sheet, describe the visit to the refugee camp.
Make sure that you use all the ‘writing to describe’ techniques on your descriptive writing sheet.

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