1. One Pager Recommendations

2. One Pagers Mrs. Lund’s proofreading marks
One Pager: Take 5 minutes to reread your essay along with the comments, both on the essay and on the rubric.
Read the descriptors on the rubric for the level you reached.

3. One Pager Feedback
Rubric Focus was Criterion C: Appreciation of the Author’s Choices.
Nearly all of you kept the author in mind. Good job!
How you can improve on Criterion C
Do more with your support. Go deep. I need to see probing analysis of your evidence exploring HOW the author is working. Without this you will not reach a 5 or 6 on this criterion.

4. Conciseness
This was our language & style focus. Most of you worked hard to be concise. How to do better:
Avoid passive voice
Read aloud. Listen to your essay. If it sounds awkward or wordy, revise until it sounds right.
Use Word’s Grammar & Style function to identify wordiness, passive voice, etc. in your writing and revise

5. CRITERION B
You can’t score in the upper levels if you are only discussing one part of the novel, play, or poem.
To show knowledge and understanding of the whole work you need evidence from various part of the work
Good lead-ins providing clear context help to show your knowledge and understanding of the work

6. EXAMPLES
Chekhov also writes, “…everything was completely drowned in the cold evening darkness”
Avoid X writes as a lead-in. It shows no awareness of a narrator (or speaker) and gives us no context for the quotation.
CONTRAST THE ABOVE EXAMPLE WITH…..
Ivan reflects to himself after telling the story, “The past…is connected with the present in an unbroken chain of events flowing one to the other.”

7. Banned Words
Utilize
mindset

8. If you have trouble identifying passive voice, wordiness, or other style issues in your writing…
Use Word’s Grammar and Style function
Word 2013:
Review:
New Word:
File: Options: Proofing: Writing Style: Grammar and Style: Options
Older Word: Grammar and Style: Options
In both cases, check boxes for problems you are having (passive voice, wordiness, etc.)

9. Rubric Focus Moving Forward
Criterion C: Not just demonstrating that you can identify the author’s choices, but showing appreciation of the author’s choices…fully analyzing them and their effects

10. Language & Style Focuses
Continuing to work on conciseness
Identifying and removing most passive voice
Using the wordiness checklist
When working within a word limit verboseness takes away from words you could be using for probing analysis
How to use semicolons, colons and dashes

11. Reflection and Goal Setting
What’s one thing I did well in this essay?
What was one weakness in this essay?
Look back at your initial writing goals for the year (Sept. 15). How are you progressing towards them?
Using feedback and the rubric, set two specific, attainable goals you’d like to work towards in your next piece of writing. These may be the same goals or new goals. For example:
1. I want to go deeper in my analysis of my evidence.
2. I want to remove passive voice from my writing and remember to write in active voice.