1. Academic Style

2. No
Yes
Academic Style

3. Academic Style YES Passive structures NO number / bullet points
We analysed the data /
The data was analysed
NO Idiomatic / colloquial (slang)
Kids / boss / gonna / stuff
NO number / bullet points
NO vague language
And so on.. / etc…
NO Phrasal verbs
Go up / look up
YES –Academic Vocabulary
See A.W.L
NO Repetition
Constant repeating same words
YES – Referencing systems
NO Personal Pronouns
I, we, In my opinion (limit use)
Academic Style
YES Complex Grammar structures
Nominalisation / noun structures
NO Contractions
It’ll = it will / It’s = it is
YES Caution / hedging – tentative language
Possibly / seems / appears / could / may
No basic language
Like – for example
Thing – factor
Lots of – significant amount
Little/ big – large
Get - obtain
Hard - difficult
Good / bad – positive / negative
Amazing / wonderful - important
NO Questions
So why did the project fail?
YES Accurate vocabulary
Difference between law / rule
NO Personal adverbs
Surprisingly / fortunately
YES Precise facts / figures
A few years ago / in 2014

4. 10+ style errors
How to make people work harder is a topic that lots of people have written about in the last few years. There are lots of different theories etc.. and I think some of them are ok. When we think about this we should remember the old Chinese proverb, that ‘you can lead a horse to water but you can’t make it drink’. So how do we increase production? It’s quite a complex subject but I’ll just talk about a couple of ideas.

5. How to make people work harder is a topic that lots of people have written about in the last few years. There are lots of different theories etc and I think some of them are ok. When we think about this we should remember the old Chinese proverb, that you can lead a horse to water but you can’t make it drink. So how do we increase production? It’s quite a complex subject but I’ll just talk about a couple of ideas.

6. Motivation has been the subject of numerous studies during recent decades, but this essay will focus on Maslow’s hierarchy of needs theory (1943) and Herzberg’s two-factor theory (1966). Their contemporary relevance to the need to motivate employees effectively will be examined critically, given that this can be considered crucial to a firm’s survival in the current economic climate.

7. a) Another thing to think about is the chance of crime getting worse.
Another factor of consideration is the possibility of crime increasing.

8. (b) Regrettably these days lots of people don’t have jobs.
Currently the rate of unemployment is at an unprecedented level.

9. (c) Sometime soon they will find a vaccine for malaria.
It has been proposed that by 2017 a vaccine for malaria will have possibly been discovered.

10. d) A few years ago the price of property in Japan went down a lot.
(d) After 2013, the Japanese property market in house value fell dramatically.
Since 2013, the price of property fell dramatically in Japan

11. e) You can’t always trust the numbers in that report.
The numbers in that report have been proposed as fundamentally unreliable.

12. f) Sadly, the high inflation led to poverty, social unrest and so on.
(f) The severe inflation led to poverty, social unrest and animosity towards the government. (list 3’s)

13. (g) He was over the moon when he won the prize.
(g) The prize gave the participant a considerable amount of pleasure

14. (h) I think we should pay students to study.
It is widely agreed that students should receive grants to study at tertiary level.

15. i) A few years ago they allowed women to vote.
(i) Women were enfranchised in 1987

16. (j) What were the main causes of the Russian revolution?
(j) The main causes of the Russian revolution were war and misgovernment.

17. 3 Practice
( (a) Another factor of consideration is the possibility of crime increasing.
(b) Currently the rate of unemployment is at an unprecedented level
(c) In the near future a vaccine for malaria may be discovered.
(d) After 2013 Japanese property market in house value fell dramatically.
(e) The numbers in that report have been proposed as fundamentally unreliable
(f) The severe inflation led to poverty, social unrest and animosity towards the government. (list 3’s)
(g) The prize gave the participant a considerable amount of pleasure
(h) It is widely agreed that students should receive grants to study at tertiary level.
(i) Women were enfranchised in 1987.
(j) The main causes of the Russian revolution were war and misgovernment.