1. Paper 1 Question 5 : - used to list things.
Descriptive techniques
The basics
Metaphor
Simile
Alliteration
Onomatopoeia
Personification
Hyperbole
5 senses
Paper 1 Question 5
Sophisticated punctuation
? – rhetorical questions.
! – emotional or commands
(don’t over use)
: - used to list things.
; - Like a comma, used to pause. (replaces the word because)
… - To show a dramatic pause or an incomplete idea.
Remember the rules
Grab their attention.
Be precise.
Describe place then character
Variety.
Danger words.
Shiny words.
Avoid chunks of dialogue.
Get to the point.
If the plot is rubbish then just describe.
Sentence Starters
The subject
Facebook is changing the world we live in.
2. A Doing word (-ing or –ed word)
Pressing the ‘like’ button lead me into a new networking world.
Worried about your Facebook addiction? Don’t be.
3. A conjunction
As with Facebook, Twitter also has its problems.
4. An adverb
Excitedly I waited for my next friend request.
5. An adjective
Angry and upset, I deleted the offensive wall post.
6. A short sentence for effect
Pain. Excruciating pain.
A/A* or 8/9
Oxymoron
Irony
Pun
Parallelism
Foreshadowing
Pathetic Fallacy
Antithesis
Syndetic and Asyndetic listing
Nominative determinism

2. Show, don’t tell

3. Language devices Metaphor
A metaphor is a figurative language device that represents one thing as if it were another, or compares two things not normally viewed as similar, such as "time is a thief." This comparison draws attention to the way time is quick and stealthy.
Simile
A simile is similar to a metaphor in that it compares two unlike things; however, a simile compares using "like" or "as." For example, "she ran like the wind.“
Hyperbole
Hyperbole is an overstatement or exaggeration of speech for an effect. In the example "the ball bounced to the sky," the ball did not literally reach the sky, but the hyperbolic expression suggests the ball bounced extremely high, so it seemed as though it touched the sky.
Personification
Describing an inanimate object with human or lifelike qualities is called personification. The sentence "The sun smiled down on me" depicts the sun as "smiling" to express the idea that sun rays feel friendly and warm, although a sun is incapable of literally smiling.
Oxymoron
An oxymoron is an example of figurative language that contains two seemingly contradictory elements, such as "wise fool," "jumbo shrimp" or "icy hot.“
Imagery
Detailed description which incorporates many of the five senses -- sight, sound, smell, taste and touch -- is called imagery. When a writer uses imagery, he or she creates a "mental picture" for the reader. That means the descriptions are so vivid the reader can almost imagine he or she is there. Many of the other figurative language devices can be examples of imagery
Your example:

4. 5 Different Ways to start a sentence
Sentences
5 Different Ways to start a sentence
The subject
Facebook is changing the world we live in.
2. A doing word (-ing or –ed word)
Pressing the ‘like’ button lead me into a new networking world.
Worried about your Facebook addiction? Don’t be.
3. A conjunction
As with Facebook, Twitter also has its problems.
4. An adverb
Excitedly I waited for my next friend request.
5. An adjective
Angry and upset, I deleted the offensive wall post.

5. Planning – Skills
Vocabulary Get rid of any boring, mono-syllabic words. Don’t repeat the same words too much. Have you used any descriptive techniques? Punctuation Have you used commas? Have you used a semi-colon? Have you used ellipsis? Sentence structures Have you used a simple sentence for effect? Have you used compound sentences? Have you used complex sentences?
Spelling and Grammar
Have you used capital letters and full stops correctly?
Have you spelt everything correctly?
Paragraph
Did you use paragraphs correctly?
Do your paragraphs link?

6. Planning – Content
Third paragraph
What is happening? Describe
Adverbs + adjectives
Semi – colon
Start sentence with a verb
Paragraph 4, 5,6 etc
Development/conflict/resolution
Repeat skills
First paragraph Where is it set? Describe it 5 senses Onomatopoeia Personification Start sentence with the subject Second paragraph Who is our character? Describe them Metaphor and Simile Start sentence with an adverb

8. WWW = EBI =
The car sped round the track, blowing a cloud of dust in its wake. Dust clouds were blowing everywhere as the sped down the track. It continued to accelerate towards the main straight, like a leopard after its prey. The sun glinted off its shiny, alloy exterior. The car screeched to a halt because an oil slick had appeared. It was too late. The back end swung out of control…