1. MLA Format
1 inch margins, all the way around, 12 pt. font, Times New Roman, Double Space
Top Left, single spaced, 12 pt font, Times New Roman.
Your name
Miss Komeiji
Class
Date
Google docs is set at 1.15 not double or single

2. Wrong Font and Wrong size

3. Press enter to get it here, Microsoft is fine as is.

4. Microsoft
Format  Paragraph
After: 0 Pt
Line Spacing double

5. MLA Format: Headers
Double click at top of page (Microsoft/Google Drive, for google drive press enter before starting it start too high)
Last Name #
GoogleDrive/Microsoft Insert Page number, upper right

6. Quick MLA Notes Lord of the Flies or Lord of the Flies
“Kill the Pig” (Golding 29).
“Quote” (Author’s last name page number).

7. Thesis: Drug use is bad. Drug use is detrimental to society.
Too vague, what does bad mean?
Drug use is bad.
Drug use is detrimental to society.
Sometimes drug use is bad for society and sometimes it’s good, it depends on the drug.
Too vague,
What’s detrimental about it? What does it do to society?
You need to choose a side and stick to it. Wishy Washy

8. More Narrow Thesis
Illegal drug use is detrimental because it encourages gang violence.
Gives an example of WHY
In Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone, Rowling creates a fictional character whose determination, faith, and cunning illustrate the indomitable spirit.
The character of the Nurse in Romeo and Juliet serves as a foil to young Juliet, delights readers with her warmth and with, and helps them realize the catastrophe

9. Types of Claims
Claims of fact or definition: These claims argue about what the definition of something is or whether something is a settled fact
Claims of cause and effect: These claims argue that one person, thing, or event caused another thing or event to occur.
Claims about value: These are claims made of what something is worth, whether we value it or not, how we would rate or categorize something.
Claims about solutions or policies: These are claims that argue for or against a certain solution or policy approach to a problem.

10. Claims of Fact
Drugs are chemicals that alter the human body or the mind, illegal drugs are drugs which have limitations on their ownership or use by a government, and are illegal in certain situations.

11. Claims of Cause and Effect
Illegal drug use can cause changes in behavior, sleep, weight, etc.
What could this essay be explaining?
How these changes take place.
Repercussions of these changes.
How these repercussions affect society.
What these changes do to the human body.

12. Claims of Value Be wary of big generalizations.
Illegal drug use is Hawaii’s biggest problem.
You better make sure that this is true. While arguable is fine, you will need to prove that this is the BIGGEST PROBLEM.
Bigger than:
Homelessness
Economy
Education
Environmental problems
Be wary of big generalizations.

13. Claims of Solution/Policy
Illegal drug use should be harshly punished due to the negative impact it has on society.
Oh man, that’s super vague huh?
How about… “Illegal drug use should be harshly punished with life in prison because it promotes gang activity in society.”

14. Peer Editors-Everyone should look at grammar and spelling
Editor 1: Does the body paragraphs correlate to the thesis? Is their thesis specific and work with the prompt?
Editor 2: Did the writer answer the prompt? If not, tell them how they can improve
Editor 3: Did the writer use evidence in their writing. Give them examples of what evidence they could have used.
Editor 4: Did the writer explain all of their thinking, were there unanswered questions?