1. YEAR 10 ENGLISH LANGUAGE FEEDBACK
April mock
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YEAR 10 ENGLISH LANGUAGE FEEDBACK

2. WORD CLASSES… Noun – Adjective - Verb - Adverb –
Gives more information about a noun.
e.g. blue, beautiful, historic, kind
An object, person, place or idea.
e.g. table, woman, Jane, Spain, peace. Concrete = the ones you can touch (pen)/ Abstract = the ones you can’t (love).
An action or ‘doing’ word. e.g. go, jump, fly, look, see, (is/am/are/was/were) Dynamic = the ones you can see (jump)/ Stative = the ones you can’t (think)
Gives more information about a verb. e.g. carefully, slowly, quickly, spontaneously, high
Noun –
Adjective -
Verb - Adverb –

3. Question one
4 MARKS

6. QUESTION TWO
8 MARKS

8. How is language used to describe the rat?
Look at each part underlined in red CAREFULLY. What techniques have been used?

9. Imagery: sense of sight
Zoom-in: Use of dynamic verbs ‘pushing’ + ‘twisting’
Imagery: sense of sight
Zoom-in: Two pre-modifying qualitative adjectives ‘wet’ + ‘greasy’
Symbolism/ Metaphor/ Imagery Zoom-in:Two pre-modifying qualitative adjectives ‘mean’ + ‘red’
Simile
Zoom-in: verb phrase ‘weighed down’ or noun ‘overeating’

10. What should my TEA paragraphs look like?
T: One of the most prominent language techniques used by the writer is… E: This may be observed in line… where the writer describes… A: The use of (mention technique) implies that… This also suggests/ implies/ reveals/ conveys… Through the use of the noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb (mention the word) the writer creates a sense of… This noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb also has connotations with… so could be used to imply… This interests the reader because…
What should it not look like?
NOT BEGINNING WITH THE TECHNIQUE
NO TECHNIQUE?!
NO QUOTE?!
NO ZOOM-IN?!
MISLABELLED TECHNIQUES
MISLABELLED WORD CLASSES
NO OR INADEQUATE ANALYSIS
SWEARING: SHOWS, QUOTE, SAYS, MAKES THE READER WANT TO READ ON #SNOOZEFEST

11. What should my TEA paragraphs look like?
T: One of the most prominent language techniques used by the writer is symbolism. E: This may be observed in line 9 where the writer describes the rat as having “mean read eyes.” A: The use of symbolism implies that the rat is almost a demonic creature as “red” often has connotations with the devil or something of an evil nature. This also reveals that Alfred views the rat as an intimidating being, something which should be feared. The use of the pre-modifying qualitative adjective “mean” also personifies the rat’s eyes which leads the reader to believe that the rat is a sly and cunning animal. The use of two adjectives side by side further reiterates the negative connotations of the rat’s physical appearance, hyperbolising the hideous impression that the rat evokes.

12. How is language used to describe the rat?
Choose one of the ideas we have discussed and write the PERFECT TEA paragraph. I want to see the ‘big’ technique first and your ideas as to why it’s used; then zoom-in and explore connotations.

15. QUESTION THREE
8 MARKS

17. Can you spot any of these techniques in the text?
Structure techniques
DEVELOPMENT (beginning, middle, end)
PARAGRAPH LENGTH
CHRONOLOGICAL
Linear
Non-linear
NARRATIVE PERSPECTIVE
First person
Second person
Third person
LIMITED NARRATOR
UNRELIABLE NARRATOR
OMNISCIENT NARRATOR
FLASHBACK
DIALOGUE
TRIPARTITE LIST
JUXTAPOSITION
SYNDETIC/ ASYNDETIC LISTING
REPETITION
SENTENCE LENGTH
SENTENCE FUNCTION
SENTENCE TYPE
Minor sentence
Simple sentence
Compound sentence
Complex sentence
Compound complex sentence
Can you spot any of these techniques in the text?

18. Okay, we’ve spotted the techniques, but what can we say about them?
EVIDENCE
ANALYSIS
Simple sentence
“Alfred felt something move.”
Abrupt opening
Limited information Creates ambiguity
Through the use of the noun “something” the reader is left feeling compelled to investigate the source of the movement.
Dialogue/ Exclamative
“Rat!”
Asyndetic listing/ Ellipsis
“Anger… hate… loss… pain”
Repetition/ Anaphora
“Almost used to/” “Used to”
Complex sentence
“He knew it was wrong to be even remotely used to such sights, or to any of it, even for a second, let alone forever…

19. What should my TEA paragraphs look like?
T: One of the most prominent structural techniques used by the writer at the beginning of the text is… As the text develops, another prominent structural technique is… Towards the end of the extract, the writer uses… E: This may be observed in line… where the writer describes… A: The use of (mention technique) implies that… This also suggests/ implies/ reveals/ conveys… Through the use of the noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb (mention the word) the writer creates a sense of… This noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb also has connotations with… so could be used to imply… This interests the reader because…
What should it not look like?
NOT WORKING THROUGH THE TEXT CHRONOLOGICALLY
NO TECHNIQUE?!
NO QUOTE?!
NO ZOOM-IN?!
MISLABELLED TECHNIQUES
NO OR INADEQUATE ANALYSIS
SWEARING: SHOWS, QUOTE, SAYS, MAKES THE READER WANT TO READ ON #SNOOZEFEST

22. QUESTION FOUR
20 MARKS

24. This should be a SWEATY paragraph…
I completely agree…
I complete disagree… OR
To some extent I agree…
To some extent I disagree…

25. Conveys Exhibited Reduces Extended Comparing Disposed Reinforced Imply
Flashback
Graphic
Simile
Dehumanising
Image
verb
Conveys
Exhibited
Reduces
Extended
Comparing
Disposed
Reinforced
Imply
Casually
immune

32. 4/20

34. 6/20

39. 13/20

42. 16/20

43. QUESTION FIVE
40 MARKS = 24+16

48. 11/40
6+5

52. 15/40
8+7

57. 25/40
15+10

65. 34/40
20+14

66. PAPER 2

67. QUESTION ONE
4 MARKS

69. A,C,E,F

70. QUESTION TWO
8 MARKS

72. Both
Range
Target
Different
Focuses

73. However
Suggesting
Reinforced
Implying

77. 1/8

79. 4/8

82. 5/8

85. 7/8

88. Effective vocabulary Adverb Simile Violent phrase visualise Witnessed
Intervention
Hovered
Illusion
Confirms
inexplicable

93. 1/12

96. 4/12

98. 11/12

101. Perspectives
First hand accounts
Interviews
comment
Both
Convey
Witnessed
Despite
Sceptic
Rational
comment

102. Presents this case Vocabulary Personifying First hand account Factual
ironically
Suggests
Supernatural
Amused
Method
Convincing
Invented
offered

107. 2/16

109. 6/16

114. 10/16

120. 15/20

124. 8/40
4+4

128. 18/40
11+7

135. 25/40
15+10

142. 36/40
21+15