1. Friday, October 11, 2013
Personal Narrative
Day 5: "Real Talk"
Do Now
Please make a list of ways to say the word said. I wonder who will have the longest list!
Example: Instead of he said, I can say he exclaimed. Of course, this choice would need to fit the tone and structure of the sentence.

2. Today's Objectives: We will: use a variety of dialogue tags.
develop characters and events in our personal narratives by incorporating relevant words and phrases through dialogue.

3. 2. 3. 4. 1. ? . Aa , ! Quick Notes Dialogue's Fab 4
Use quotation marks to indicate the words the character is saying.
“Help me!” exclaimed the little girl. 1.
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Make sure you have expressed who is doing the talking. 2.
"I bought a new jacket yesterday," Tam, whispered.
Always begin a new paragraph when the speaker changes. 3.
“I'm takin' it to the house,” Mo announced. “My ankle is on fire, so I'm not staying for track practice.”
“Word,” his friend agreed. . 4. ,
Use appropriate punctuation and capitalization. Aa ? !
“Can I really get these shoes?” Angela asked her mom

4. Grandmother
It was May, 24, 2011 and I was out residential in V.A. and my mother called me on the phone and told me the terrible news. When I heard her say your grandmother just died my mind went numb. I immediately broke down and start crying. I didn’t want to believe what I just heard. I couldn’t believe grandmother was gone and I felt like life was over. I don’t know, it really just felt like the world became all black. The staff was trying to calm me down but it didn’t work. I was feeling something I never felt before. It was a pill too big to swallow. I tried to use all of the coping skills I had, but it didn’t work. When I finally calmed down my head was spinning and it stopped spinning a little when my case manager told me that I can go to the funeral.
You see my grandmother raised me. My mother has 10 kids so my grandmother raised me and my sister. When I was out in resi I had two home passes. I knew she was sick but I didn’t know how sick she really was. She always used to say son you know Imma be alright. I am worried about you so you don’t worry about me. So I thought she’s goning to be ok and she’s so strong nothing could ever break her. So I used my weekend passes to go chill with my men. I went home both weekends and chilled with them. Then on that day 2 staff and my therapist came and got me off the unit. I knew it had to be something bad and no family team meeting. This is when my mother was on the phone and told me on the phone.
I was able to go to the funeral and what hurt me the most was seeing her casket. It finally hit me and I felt like it was real. I kind of came down not believing it. Then it hit me she was finally gone. This really changed me because I made my grandmother a promise that I was going to chill out, go to school, and not get locked up no more. Then when I turned around a year later I’m sitting in the same boat. I tried and there’s always something that took me off balance. But, this year I’m going to try my hardest and make it my goal to go day by day, month by month, year by year, and not get in trouble. I want to keep that promise to my grandmother. I owe her this and not a single minute passes that I don’t forget about this promise. I never forget. Every time I do something wrong I always think about her. I want her to be watching over me proud. I want her to be proud of the grandson she worked so hard to raise. Grandmother I love you.

5. Writers at Work Task(s) at hand: (1) adding real talk to essays
(2) mapping essays using graphic organizers

6. Wrap it up!
Look at your Dialogue Tags sheet. Circle two dialogue tags that you used or might use in your essay.
Make sure all of your work from today is dated and placed in your writing folder.
Tomorrow we will complete a 5-minute writing probe and explore comma confusions!