1. Making your writing better
Revising!
Making your writing better

2. Revising vs. Editing
Revising means trying to make your writing better by making changes in ideas, organization, voice, word choice, and sentence fluency.
Editing means trying to make your writing correct by making changes in conventions.

3. RADaR: Revision Strategies
R: Replace
A: Add
D: Delete
and
R: Rearrange

4. First Draft
I went to the crossroads. I was lost in thought. My shoelaces were untied. I stopped. I took a look around me.

5. Revised Draft
I went to the crossroads. I was lost in thought. My shoelaces were untied. I stopped. I took a look around me.
Lost in thought, I approached the deserted crossroads. I stopped and took a look around me.

6. Replace
Went was replaced with ________________

7. Add
_________________ was added to describe the crossroads.

8. Delete
The part about the ______________ was deleted.

9. Rearrange The first sentence was combined with the ________ sentence.
The fifth sentence was combined with the _______ sentence.