1. FINE TUNING YOUR CLOSE READING
INTERNAL ASSESSMENT
HILLARY CLINTON EXTRACT

2. Put in front of you: 1. The Passage 2. The questions 3. Your answers …
Put in front of you: 1. The Passage 2. The questions 3. Your answers …. Get ready to fine tune your answers.

3. Remember: Analysis Questions (Show how, Explain, Analysis) 1) “Quote”
2) Comment – Literal Meaning of a word
- Technique (i.e. list, metaphor, rhetorical questions)
3) Effect.
Summarise questions (In Your Own Words)
Use Bullet Points
Punctuation (colon, brackets, dashes) – explain its function
Lists – function? To show the number and variety of ..

4. Q1: Analyse the effect of punctuation in the opening sentence (2 marks)
Colon is used introduce further information that supports the first statement about women’s contributions
List: shows the number and variety of ways women contribute
Ends in a climax by starting with traditional roles and ending
with positions of power.

5. 2a) What is the single main contrast suggested between various locations listed in lines 4-7? (2)
Contrast between traditional female roles (Third world/developing) and More male dominated professional roles (First world/developed) i.e. roles of women contrasted in third and first world countries.

6. 2b) Analyse how the sentence contrast reinforces this contrast
2b) Analyse how the sentence contrast reinforces this contrast. (2 marks)
Places are organised in contrasting pairs
Commas separate the pairs
Use of “or” emphasises the differences
(any two)

7. 3) Look again at the sentence in lines 19-21
3) Look again at the sentence in lines Analyse the order in which the various examples are arranged. (2 marks)
List begins with traditional female roles within the house
List shows the increasing complexity/power of roles
List culminates with the ultimate role (gender neutral) outside the home (climax)

8. 4) Look at lines In your own words, summarise the problems faced by women in some parts of the world. (3)
Bullet Points x 3
Not surviving illnesses that we have medicine for. (prevented, treated)
Their children are starving due to lack of money, jobs etc (poverty, deprivation)
Male family members will not allow them to go to school
Made to work in the sex trades
Denied financial support by banks/right to vote

9. Q5: Analyse how line 22 acts as a link in the writer’s argument
“Women” links back to the earlier comments about the role and contribution of women in society.
“also are dying …” links forward to the next set of comments about the difficulties women also face.
Also is the connector/conjunctive

10. Q6: In your own words, explain three ways in which families rely on women.
Use Bullet points.
To nurture and care for their families
To do the housework
To earn money to help the family
To look after other people in the family

11. Q7: Analyse how effective the final paragraph is as a conclusion to the passage as a whole. (2 marks)
“as long as .. As long as…” (Quote) Repetition (Comment – technique) Effectively emphasises that if these inequities continue, then there will be no improvement. Effective because it makes us feel guilty?, determined to make a change? Effective because it acts to reinforce earlier descriptions of ways women are being disadvantaged. (Effect) “less .. Less..” – repetition. Less means to have not as much of something. This is effective because it emphases that women are being denied which reinforces earlier comments in the passage.

12. “overworked, underpaid”
contrast – effectively reinforces earlier comments by emphasising the unfairness of the situation
“…will not be realised”
Tone. “Not be realised” means to fail or not happen. This is effective because it has a concerned tone/threatening tone that makes the reader feel the comment is a warning to take action otherwise nothing will change.

13. 8) Identify the tone used in this passage and analyse at lease one way this is created.
“ as long as … as long as…” Tone of Frustration – repetition of the words suggest that we need to stop doing the things that are causing problems (and find two more quotes to analyse!) “…forced into prostitution …” Tone of anger/horror – forced means to be made to do something against your will. Effectively shows that she is angered and horrified that this should happen to women. (and find two more quotes to analyse)

14. 9) Hillary Clinton sums up her message as “women’s rights are human rights’ With reference to the text, analysis how another part of the speech argues that an improvement in the status of women would benefit the rest of society (3 marks)
Look for quotes that show betterment in a woman’s home => larger social improvements… Look at line 35 “… the potential of the human family to create a peaceful, prosperous world” (Quote) Word choice of peaceful (harmony) and prosperous (thriving emotionally, economically) (Comment – technique and literal meanings) have positive connotations suggesting an improvement in homes will have a positive effect on a wider social scale. (effect)

15. Q9 continued …
“And when families flourish, communities and nations do as well” (17) “women’s rights are human rights ..” (29) “…as mothers … as leaders” (2)

16. 10) Purpose and Evidence (quote from text)
To inform us/raise awareness off the inequities that exist for women throughout the world… I know this because it describes ……… gives information about how women are disadvantaged in ….. To persuade use to take a stand I know this because it uses words with strong emotional connotations such as “as long as …” to suggest that we need to make a change …

17. 11) Audience and evidence
Audience: women, people interested in human rights, equal rights
(i.e. be specific) men? Give evidence i.e. lists the benefits of men supporting women by …..
I know this because … the text deals with ….