1. Style Lesson #3 Presented by Katie, Cassie, and Cayce
Actions
Suit the actions to the word, the word to the action.
- Shakespeare
Style Lesson #3
Presented by Katie, Cassie, and Cayce

2. Quick Grade School Review
We discussed the problem
Subject
Verb
Object
Our goal should be to make as many of our sentences as possible this clear.

3. Principles of Clarity #1&2
#1.Make main characters subjects. #2.Make important actions verbs.

4. What NOT to do...
Yesterday, a fight took place between Rick and Bobby.
What is wrong:
Fight, a verb, is acting as a subject in this sentence.
Rick and Bobby, who are subjects, are acting as verbs.

5. How to FIX it: Yesterday, Rick and Bobby had a fight. SUBJECTS VERB
WHAT WAS BAD: Yesterday, a fight took place between Rick and Bobby.

6. Nominalization Taking verbs and making them nouns.
Can cause weak and confusing sentences!
EX: discover vs. discovery
EX: she flies vs. her flying

7. A Sentence seems clear When...
Perception
A Sentence seems clear When...
when its important actions are
in verbs.

8. A Step By Step Guide by corporations means the loss of jobs for
We are going to fix this sentence...
The outsourcing of high-tech work to Asia
by corporations means the loss of jobs for
many American workers.

9. Step #1: Underline the first seven or eight words in a sentence.
The outsourcing of high-tech work to Asia
by corporations means the loss of jobs for
many American workers.

10. Step #2: bold abstract nouns as simple subjects.
The outsourcing of high-tech work to Asia
by corporations means the loss of jobs for
many American workers.

11. Step #3: Continue reading until you come to a verb.
The outsourcing of high-tech work to Asia
by corporations means the loss of jobs for
many American workers.

12. Step #4: Decide who your main characters are.
The outsourcing of high-tech work to Asia
by corporations means the loss of jobs for
many American workers.

13. Step #5: Look for the actions those charACters perform.
The outsourcing of high-tech work to Asia
by corporations means the loss of jobs for
many American workers.

14. Step #6: Rewrite the sentence by first fixing nominalizations.
Outsourcing  Outsource
Loss Lose
The outsourcing of high-tech work to Asia
by corporations means the loss of jobs for
many American workers.

15. Step #7: Rewrite the sentence by making the characters the subjects of those actions.
Outsourcing  Outsource
Loss Lose
Corporations outsource
American workers lose
The outsourcing of high-tech work to Asia
by corporations means the loss of jobs for
many American workers.

16. The final product:
Many American workers are losing their jobs, because corporations are outsourcing their high-tech work to Asia.
The outsourcing of high-tech work to Asia by corporations means the loss of jobs for many American workers.