1. +10 Points For Complete Share
You Need Two Things Out 1. Expanding on Evidence Notes 2. Conclusions Practice from yesterday
+10 Points For Complete Share
October 19, 2017

2. Match The Score GAME RULES
Focus 1: Learn to focus and maintain a central idea in one’s own expository writing with a range of sufficient evidence and elaboration.
GAME RULES
There are six examples. Each example is worth +50 points.
In order to be eligible for the points, we must first discuss the WHAT, WHY, and APPLY of each example. All class members must be able to participate in that part.
After we discuss, each color group will get one vote to decide on the score for the example. If the class consensus matches the teacher’s score, you earn your +50 points (as long as you can explain why the grade is correct).
The more on top of things we are, the more points you can get.
Match The Score

3. Clothes are an important part of my culture
Clothes are an important part of my culture. I like to wear sweatpants and sweatshirts because they are comfy. It is important for me to feel comfortable whenever I can. That is why I wear sweatpants and sweatshirts and they make my culture unique to me.
Example One: Proving that clothes are an important part of their culture.
WHAT: An example?
WHY: Because they’re comfy?
APPLY: There’s nothing there 1
4 Exemplary
3 Proficient
2 Emerging
1 Incomplete
Uses a range of well-chosen, relevant, and sufficient evidence to create a vivid sense of personal cultural identity
Uses a sufficient range of evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity
Uses vague, irrelevant, or insufficient evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity.
Provides little or no evidence to support or develop a sense of cultural identity.

4. One example of how clothes show my culture is all the hoodies and sweatpants I like to wear on a daily basis. Why is this my culture, you might ask? Because I’m a lazy person, and these clothes are the prime way that I express my laziness, which is different than most of my family. They make me unique from my parents in so many ways. And that’s how clothes are part of my culture.
Example Two: Proving that clothes are an important part of their culture.
WHAT: An example
WHY: Because they show how lazy I am
APPLY: It makes me different than my parents?
4 Exemplary
3 Proficient
2 Emerging
1 Incomplete
Uses a range of well-chosen, relevant, and sufficient evidence to create a vivid sense of personal cultural identity
Uses a sufficient range of evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity
Uses vague, irrelevant, or insufficient evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity.
Provides little or no evidence to support or develop a sense of cultural identity. 2

5. As often as possible, you’ll find me lounging around in my favorite old sweatshirt and baggy pair of sweats. Even though this embarrasses my mom and she looks for any reason to prevent people from seeing me dressed like a “hooligan” (her word, not mine), I can’t help but find an immense comfort in the laziness that washes over me ever time I pull that old hoody up over my head and dissolve into a movie or video game for a few hours. Once they’re on, no amount of berating from my mom can get me to change into nicer clothes. They an expression of that deeper part of me that says, “you deserve a day just for you.” After all, isn’t that the American way?
Example Three: Proving that clothes are an important part of their culture.
WHAT: An example with details
WHY: Because the clothes represent deep conflicts between me and my mom
APPLY: We all deserve to be our own person – it’s America
4 Exemplary
3 Proficient
2 Emerging
1 Incomplete
Uses a range of well-chosen, relevant, and sufficient evidence to create a vivid sense of personal cultural identity
Uses a sufficient range of evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity
Uses vague, irrelevant, or insufficient evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity.
Provides little or no evidence to support or develop a sense of cultural identity. 3

6. Example Four: Proving that holidays are important to their culture.
Traditions like holiday celebrations are an important part of my family’s culture. We may not have a lot of opportunities to get together, but we always make time three times a year to gather at someone’s house for turkey on Thanksgiving, ham on Christmas, and lamb on Easter to sit down together and have a good laugh or share the news of the year. There may be long stretches of time in between when we don’t see each other, but by golly, those traditions sure do keep us a tight knit family.
Example Four: Proving that holidays are important to their culture.
WHAT: Examples of holiday traditions
WHY: Because they keep us together
APPLY: Not quite sure… 2
4 Exemplary
3 Proficient
2 Emerging
1 Incomplete
Uses a range of well-chosen, relevant, and sufficient evidence to create a vivid sense of personal cultural identity
Uses a sufficient range of evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity
Uses vague, irrelevant, or insufficient evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity.
Provides little or no evidence to support or develop a sense of cultural identity.

7. Example Five: Proving that holidays are important to their culture.
When you have a family as busy as mine, it’s hard to find time to spend with each other, but traditional holiday gatherings are one way that we keep in touch. Whether we’re howling with laughter over heaps of Thanksgiving turkey and mashed potatoes, or tucking in to Aunt Denise’s Holiday ham as the Christmas lights twinkle outside, the fuzzy, warm feeling of sharing the deep traditions of my family always helps us renew our dedication to each other. The old fights of long ago melt like the ice cream in our bowls as we chat and exchange stories. And even when the last of the dessert has been licked clean, we feel the need to linger at the table, just in case this is the last time any of us might be there. Because even though our group has been changed by death and other factors beyond our control, it’s the feelings and memories that will knit us together and welcome the newcomers in the years to come.
Example Five: Proving that holidays are important to their culture.
WHAT: Examples of Holiday traditions, especially food
WHY: Because they keep us together
APPLY: Things don’t last forever, so we cherish the time we have
4 Exemplary
3 Proficient
2 Emerging
1 Incomplete
Uses a range of well-chosen, relevant, and sufficient evidence to create a vivid sense of personal cultural identity
Uses a sufficient range of evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity
Uses vague, irrelevant, or insufficient evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity.
Provides little or no evidence to support or develop a sense of cultural identity. 4

8. Example Six: Proving that holidays are important to their culture.
My favorite holidays are Christmas, Easter, and Thanksgiving in that order. They are the holidays my family always celebrates. We always spend time at people’s houses, eating good food and talking and laughing. Without these holidays, we would not be very cultural and our family would feel not as strong – we might not even like each other.
Example Six: Proving that holidays are important to their culture.
WHAT: Examples of holidays?
WHY: Because we like them…
APPLY: They keep us together
4 Exemplary
3 Proficient
2 Emerging
1 Incomplete
Uses a range of well-chosen, relevant, and sufficient evidence to create a vivid sense of personal cultural identity
Uses a sufficient range of evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity
Uses vague, irrelevant, or insufficient evidence to develop the explanation of cultural identity.
Provides little or no evidence to support or develop a sense of cultural identity. 2