1. BODY 2 (events, activities)
INTRODUCTION
1. HOOK (question, general sentence)
2. BACKGROUD (GENERAL INFO) – (who, where, when, what, why)
3. MAIN IDEA (thesis) – should include body 1 and 2
Have you ever gone to an Emirati wedding? Last year, we had a big party when my sister got married in Al Ain. I will never forget this special day because everything was beautiful and fun.
IDEAS (body 1) people, music, dancing, colors, fashionable clothes, flowers, stage
Everything at the wedding looked beautiful. The bride wore a lovely white dress. In addition, everyone had fashionable clothes, and there were many kinds of sweets. Also, there were flowers with many colors, and a big stage for the bride to walk on, so everyone could see her. Everyone was happy and it was so wonderful.
BODY 1 (look like)
1. TS – GENERAL adjective: beautiful
2. SS – DETAILS + (TW in addition, Also, for example.) + (grammar: there was/there were)
3. CS – repeat TS
IDEAS (body 2) – dancing, henna, clothes and other gifts, like gold, poetry, music, photos
All of the activities were very enjoyable. My favorite activity was the dancing. The day before the wedding, my sister and her friends got henna, and they looked at all the gifts. For example, the groom gave a lot of gold. Also, there were beautiful clothes and other gifts. On the day of wedding, we did many things First, we took photos of the bride with all her family and also her friends. Next, we switched on the music. The bride’s sister danced, and after that, the bride walked slowly across the stage while the DJ read poetry. It was so much fun.
BODY 2 (events, activities)
1. TS: fun & enjoyable
2. SS: (grammar: past verbs + TW: First, next, Then, Later, The day before, after)
3. CS – repeat TS
To sum up, my sister’s wedding was fantastic!! I hope we never change this special tradition in the UAE, and I hope you get invited to many of these special parties.
CONCLUSION
1. Signal word (in conclusion, to sum up)
2. Repeat MI (thesis)
3. advice, future prediction

2. The Best Cultural Event
(final draft)
The Best Cultural Event
Have ever gone to an Emirati wedding? Last year, we had a big party when my sister got married in Al Ain. I will never forget this special day because everything was so beautiful and fun.
Everything at the wedding looked lovely. The bride wore a wonderful white dress. In addition, everyone had fashionable clothes, and there were many kinds of sweets. Also, there were flowers with many colors, and a big stage for the bride to walk on, so everyone could see her. Everyone was happy and it was so wonderful.
All of the activities were very enjoyable. My favorite activity was the dancing. The day before the wedding, my sister and her friends got henna, and they looked at all the gifts. For example, the groom gave a lot of gold. Also, there were beautiful clothes and other gifts. On the day of wedding, we did many things First, we took photos of the bride with all her family and also her friends. Next, we switched on the music. The bride’s sister danced, and after that, the bride walked slowly across the stage while the DJ read poetry. It was so much fun.
To sum up, my sister’s wedding was fantastic!! I hope we never change this special tradition in the UAE.
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