1. REVISING

2. Repetition - Blue
***3 minutes of silence while everyone reads through their partners paper. Keep an eye out for repetition of the same or similar PHRASES. Do not highlight individual words at the beginning of a sentence yet.***
Macbeth was crazy because he saw crazy things and did crazy stuff. His wife was also crazy.
Macbeth was a hero in the beginning, and Duncan thought he was a hero. He was not a hero for long.

3. Initial wording - YELLOW
Highlight the first word of every sentence yellow. When finished, In the upper left hand corner of the first page, list any words that were repeated more than 3 times in the whole paper.
Initial
word
repetition: -I
-Then

4. Transitions -Pen
The following are a list of transitions. Please choose one that sounds good for the beginning of each paragraph. If the author has no paragraphs write a large ‘P’ where you think a paragraph is needed. Typically, paragraphs begin when the scene changes or the idea shifts. Furthermore, For example, For instance, However, Also, On the other hand, As a result, In addition, Although, Likewise, For starters, Similarly, Therefore, In other words, First, Secondly, Then, Thirdly, Next, Lastly, Overall, In conclusion, Indeed,

5. List of ‘be’ verbs:
Be verbs - Pink is
were am be
are
being
was
been

6. Be verbs - Pink
BAD:
After many attempts to “revive” downtown Greensboro, it finally appears to be happening. Streets that were once empty after dark are now bustling with activity – or at least they are showing signs of life.
GOOD:
After many attempts to “revive” downtown Greensboro, it finally appears the city is bursting with new life. Streets that once laid desolate after dark awaken with activity – or at least they flicker with signs of life.

7. Introduction
Is the introduction more than two sentences long? (No: ADD MORE) Is the thesis the last sentence of the introduction? (No: MISSING THESIS)

8. Paragraph 1
Is there a first body paragraph? (No: MISSING BODY1) Is there a clear topic sentence? (No: MISSING TOPIC1) Are there two citations (i.e. ( ). ) in this paragraph? (No: MISSING CITATION) Are there two quotes from Hamlet in this paragraph? (No: MISSING CITATION)

9. Paragraph 2 Is there a second body paragraph? (No: MISSING BODY2)
Is there a clear topic sentence? (No: MISSING TOPIC2)
Are there two citations (i.e. ( ). ) in this paragraph? (No: MISSING CITATION)
Are there two quotes from Hamlet in this paragraph? (No: MISSING CITATION)

10. Paragraph 3
Is there a third body paragraph? (No: MISSING BODY3) Is there a clear topic sentence? (No: MISSING TOPIC3) Are there two citations (i.e. ( ). ) in this paragraph? (No: MISSING CITATION) Are there two quotes from Hamlet in this paragraph? (No: MISSING CITATION)

11. Conclusion
Is the conclusion more than two sentences long? (No: ADD MORE) Is the thesis restated in the first sentence of the introduction? (No: MISSING THESIS) Are there five paragraphs total? (No: NOT 5 PARAGRAPHS)

12. Return the paper to the original owner.
Number 1-2 on the back of your own essay.
Did I start my story with an interesting introduction that will make the reader want to read more? 1.
Yes or No- need imagery in my first paragraph. 5 senses.
Do all of my sentences make sense?
2. Yes or N- I circled areas of confusion that need to be fixed with pen or pencil

13. EDITING

14. EDITING Number every line of your essay.
Pull out a piece of lined paper, put your name on it
Label it as such (to number 15):
Sam Soandso
Period 1
Rule #| Peer Initials| Notes (Line numbers)
1 | J. J | Caps needed line 4 , 24,
2 | |
3 | |

15. Editing: RULE 1 Capitalization of names and places and people:
Correct:
Fortinbras –Denmark -Poland -Old Hamlet -Julius Caesar
Incorrect:
scotland
scottish -duncan –old Hamlet
dunsinane hill

16. Editing: RULE 2 Capitalization of the time period: Correct:
-modern times -Renaissance
-16th century
Incorrect:
- Modern Times -renaissance
- 16th Century

17. Editing: RULE 3 Proper Citation: Correct:
“Fair is foul and foul is fair” (1.1.60).
“Fair is foul and foul is fair!” (1.1.60).
Incorrect:
“Fair is foul and foul is fair” (Act 1, Scene 1, Line 60).
“Fair is foul and foul is fair” (p. 353).
“Fair is foul and foul is fair” (Line 60).

18. Editing: RULE 4
Commas should follow the first phrase in sentence that starts with “In.”
Correct:
In Act 2, Macbeth shows is true colors.
In the drama of Macbeth, Shakespeare used a lot of dramatic irony.
Incorrect:
In Act 2, Scene 3, Line 10, Macbeth shows is true colors.
In line 8 of Macbeth, Shakespeare used a lot of dramatic irony.

19. Editing: RULE 5
Commas should follow transition words at the beginning of a sentence:
Correct:
Also, -First, -For example,
Lastly, -Therefore,
Incorrect:
Lastly Macbeth ended in a catastrophe.

20. Editing: RULE 6
In the thesis, if your peer had three different topics named, they need a comma between each item in the list. Check the conclusion as well for the same list:
Correct: Shakespeare used dramatic irony, foreshadowing, and soliloquy to engage his audience.
Incorrect: Shakespeare used a tragic hero tragic flaw and catastrophe.

21. Editing: RULE 7
Please remove all air quotes (italicizing is better for emphasis; however, in most cases, no emphasis is needed at all.)
Correct:
- The bell that Macbeth says he hears…
- This is also a hallucination…
Incorrect:
“The ghost” that Hamlet says he hears…
This is also a “hallucination” he sees.

22. Editing: RULE 8 You should never say, “in this quote…” etc. Correct:
-This shows… -In this scene…
-This illustrates… -This is an example of
Incorrect:
-In this quote
-This quote shows
-In these words I have typed for you
-In that sentence there

23. Editing: RULE 9
You should never mention “I” or “you” in an analytical essay.
Correct:
-One could plainly see that…
-Obviously, Shakespeare wanted…
-Most individuals would…
-The audience could see -The reader could see
Incorrect:
-I am going to write to you about
-This essay will explain to you
-You can see that
-We can see that

24. Editing: RULE 10
Do not put quotes side by side Correct: Claudius says, “Gertrude, do not drink.” She refuses his request and states, “ I will.” In an aside he admits his mistake: “That is the poisoned cup!” ( ). Incorrect: “Gertrude, do not drink.” “ I will.” “That is the poisoned cup!” ( ). Claudius-“Gertrude, do not drink.” Gertrude-“ I will.” Claudius- “That is the poisoned cup!” ( ).

25. Editing: RULE 11 Do not start a sentence with ‘And’ or ‘But.’ Correct:
This prophecy stated that none “of woman born” could harm Macbeth. Macbeth thought he was invincible.
This prophecy stated that none “of woman born” could harm Macbeth, so Macbeth thought he was invincible.
Incorrect:
This prophecy stated that none “of woman born” could harm Macbeth. And Macbeth thought he was invincible.

26. Editing: RULE 12
Make sure that act and scene are capitalized ONLY if they are presenting numbers.
Correct:
Dramatic irony is when the audience is aware of something that some characters are not going on in the scene. In Act 2 Scene 2, dramatic irony is present.
The last act was filled with death.
Incorrect:
Dramatic irony is when the audience is aware of something that some characters are not in act 2 scene 2 dramatic irony is present.
The last Act was filled with death.

27. Editing: RULE 13
Macbeth should be underlined ONLY IF the word is describing the drama title.
Correct:
Macbeth was deceived by the witches.
Macbeth is Shakespeare’s shortest play.
Incorrect:
Macbeth was a tragic hero.

28. Rule 14
Do not capitalize dramatic/literary devices unless it is at the beginning of the sentence.
Correct:
Dramatic irony, soliloquy, and foreshadowing are evident in Macbeth.
Incorrect:
Dramatic Irony, Soliloquy, and Foreshadowing are evident in Macbeth.

29. Rule 15 Analytical essays are written in present tense. Correct:
Claudius says, “Gertrude, do not drink.” She refuses his request and states, “ I will.” In an aside he admits his mistake: “That is the poisoned cup!” ( ).
Incorrect:
Claudius said, “Gertrude, do not drink.” She refused his request and stated, “ I will.” In an aside he admitted his mistake: “That is the poisoned cup!” ( ).

30. Like
We will now be silent for 3 minutes and read through the essay. When finished reading, try to think of 2 or 3 things this person did very well on their essay and write about these achievements on the back of the editing sheet. Please be sure to sign your name as well.