1. Get your writing materials on your desk.
What has been difficult in completing this work?
Where did you find non-book quotations?

2. Mr. Short English 12: College Now 6 December 2016
Writing Workshop
Mr. Short
English 12: College Now
6 December 2016

3. Today’s Agenda: Writing workshop Pronoun Reference
Coordinating Conjunctions

4. Today’s notes are brought to you by:
It is difficult to make grammar exciting.
Hopefully Dr. Steve can help keep your attention.

6. Review of Assignment: The Past: You should have completed:
Paragraph One
Introduction [MoBaThBlue]
Paragraph two
One short sentence per section.
6 total sentences allowed. Focus on analysis in body.
Paragraph Three
Main point
Paragraph Four

7. Review of Assignment: The Future: Paragraph 5 Final Paragraph
Main point
Final Paragraph
Conclusion
You can add another paragraph
of support here!

8. Use your Plot Chart ya dingus!
Paper Outline:
Use your Plot Chart ya dingus!
Parapgraph 1
MoBaThBlue
Paragraph 2
One small sentence per section.
Section overview.
Paragraphs 3, 4, 5, etc…
Main points of support.
Final Paragraph
Conclusion.

9. MoBaThBlue: Hold on to this paper FOREVER!!!

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“The Beast” full clip

17. Hold On To This Sheet FOREVER!
Use this format for the remainder of your academic career!
Yes! Thesis statements are important senior year and in college.

18. Mmmmmm, Delicious: Context Quotation Analysis
Slim is the most respected man on the ranch. In chapter two he was described as very calm, and “there was a gravity in his manner and a quiet so profound that all talk stopped when he spoke. His authority was so great that his word was taken on any subject” (Steinbeck 33). This description, given when we first meet Slim, shows the attitude of others toward him. This scene foreshadows Candy looking to Slim for a reversal on the decision to shoot his dog. Candy does so, because Slim’s word is law and he is the only one that can change the decision of the men.
Context
Quotation
Analysis 18

19. Quote Sandwich:
Slim is the most respected man on the ranch. In chapter two he was described as very calm, and “there was a gravity in his manner and a quiet so profound that all talk stopped when he spoke. His authority was so great that his word was taken on any subject” (Steinbeck 33). This description, given when we first meet Slim, shows the attitude of others toward him. This scene foreshadows Candy looking to Slim for a reversal on the decision to shoot his dog. Candy does so, because Slim’s word is law and he is the only one that can change the decision of the men. 19

20. Mr. Short’s Book: Please pretend Mr. Short has written a book.
In this book, citations are discussed.

21. Mr. Short’s Book: Please pretend Mr. Short has written a book.
In this book, citations are discussed.

22. Citations: Proper Punctuation
Mr. Short said, “the quote will start with a lower case letter if you lead into it” (Short 4).
“The quote will be capitalized if it begins the sentence,” according to our teacher (Short 5).
Any punctuation used in the quote will remain.
The author and page number will be in parenthesis after the quote.
Author name and page number must be included in the citation.
The period goes after the parenthesis.

23. Quote Sandwich:
Slim is the most respected man on the ranch. In chapter two he was described as very calm, and “there was a gravity in his manner and a quiet so profound that all talk stopped when he spoke. His authority was so great that his word was taken on any subject” (Steinbeck 33).
You MUST include the author’s name and page number of the words you are using.
This can be differentiated. 23

24. Variation:
Slim is the most respected man on the ranch. In section two he was described as very calm, and “there was a gravity in his manner and a quiet so profound that all talk stopped when he spoke. His authority was so great that his word was taken on any subject” (Steinbeck 33).
Author name
& page number
AFTER
Slim is the most respected man on the ranch. In section two Steinbeck described him as very calm, and “there was a gravity in his manner and a quiet so profound that all talk stopped when he spoke. His authority was so great that his word was taken on any subject” (33).
Author name BEFORE
=======
Page number
AFTER 24

25. Works Cited: Your works cited page will be the final page.
This is not counted in your 3-4 pieces of paper requirement.
Citations have been completed for you.
Book.
Handouts.
Notes/Lecture.

27. Self Advocacy: If you are unsure of areas, find out.
Use Purdue’s Online Writing Lab (OWL).
Ask someone for help.
Come in during office hours.

28. Final Pointers: Ask for help. Keep paragraph two short.
Thesis statement conferencing anyone?
Keep paragraph two short.
3-4 pieces of paper requirement

29. MLA Formatting: Your Name Instructor Name Class Name Date Due
Times New Roman
Size 12
Double Spaced

30. Milk: Fire Safety: What Cavemen Did: Raking Leaves: Sushi:
Fire Safety:
What Cavemen Did:
Raking Leaves:
Sushi:

32. Additional Assistance:
Please consider meeting during a free period or staying after school to work on your Thematic Analysis assignment.
Some students have done so already. Their papers have been improved.

33. Self Advocacy: If you are unsure of areas, find out.
Use Purdue’s Online Writing Lab (OWL).
Ask someone for help.
Come in during office hours.

34. Schedule Breakdown: November 27th: Friendship; “Us Two”
November 28th: Calendar & Character Review
November 29th: OM&M Exam & Thematic Analysis
November 30th: Writing an introduction (MoBaThBlue)
December 1st: Thesis statements
December 4th: Thesis statement conferencing
December 5th: Quotation sandwich and rough drafting
December 6th: Citations & Writing workshop
December 7th: Self-Reflection & Typing
December 8th : Peer Editing
December 11th: Paper due
December 12th: Film Intro
December 13th: Film Viewing
December 14th: Film + Goodbye Of Mice & Men
December 15th: Food & Drink Day (not a party)

36. Critical Thinking: We are hand writing We are typing
Half of the period tomorrow.
We are typing
The full period on Thursday.
You should have a rough draft written before we show up.
Today we will be learning how to improve our writing.
Take notes and edit your rough draft, and improve your writing as you draft tomorrow.

38. Pronoun Reference:
Pronoun: a replacement for a noun that refers to participants or communication.
Examples: I, them, it, what, who, this, something, you, he, that.
Reference: denoting, or pertaining to.
Example: to give hint toward something, or to make a connection.

40. Milk: Fire Safety: What Cavemen Did: Raking Leaves: Sushi:
Fire Safety:
What Cavemen Did:
Raking Leaves:
Sushi:

41. Pronoun Reference:
In your notebooks, please describe what is happening in the following sentences:
After a lot of thought, he was sure it was right.
Each of them decided to make one.
He went to do the thing like he told her he would.

42. Pronoun Reference:
1) After a lot of thought, he was sure it was right.
After a lot of thought, Steven was sure the math problem was right.
After a lot of thought, Ronald McDonald was sure the formula for Secret Sauce was blended correctly.
After a lot of thought, Prime Minister Frankenstein was sure the talking apple was correct in his argument for earlier release of prisoners.

43. Pronoun Reference: 2) Each of them decided to make one.
Each of them decided to make a sandwich.
Each of the basketball mascots decided to make a birdhouse.
All three of the octogenarians decided to make a skateboard.

44. Pronoun Reference:
3) He went to do the thing like he told her he would.
Tom went to do the thing like he told Sharon he would.
Diego went to the top of Gumdrop Mountain like he told Dora he would.
The Duke of Smelly Garbage Land drove his trash can to deliver the moldy socks like he told The Princess he would. 44

45. Pronoun Reference: What does all of this mean?
Apply these new skills to your writing.
“He told him to hide in the brush so they wouldn’t find him”
George told Lennie to hide in the brush so the men from the ranch wouldn’t find him.”
“She was talking to him and it was lying there, foreshadowing her death.
Curley’s Wife was talking to Lennie and the dead puppy was lying there, foreshadowing her death.

46. Pronoun Reference: What does all of this mean?
Apply these new skills to your writing.
When writing, use “The Rule of 3s”
Every fourth sentence, refer to the noun by name.
Example: George was very protective of Lennie. He was a good friend. Slim knew he was a good person. George was always looking out for Lennie.

47. Pronoun Reference Worksheet:
Part 1: Create the most wacky, crazy and creative sentences for numbers 1-5.
Part 2: Write a detailed character sketch with the 4 indicators listed.
Practice “The Rule of 3s”
Fancy Time

49. Coordinating Conjunctions:
Coordinate: to bring different elements into a relationship that will ensure efficiency or harmony.
Showing some relationship
Conjunction: the act of joining or condition of being joined.
To connect

50. BOYSFAN: Remember each coordinating conjunction with the word BOYSFAN.
But Or
Yet So
For
And
Nor

52. Milk: Fire Safety: What Cavemen Did: Raking Leaves: Sushi:
Fire Safety:
What Cavemen Did:
Raking Leaves:
Sushi:

53. Practice:
Combine the sentences below, using a coordinating conjunction.
I like to play video games.
My mom hates when I’m inside for too long.

54. Practice:
Combine the sentences below, using a coordinating conjunction.
Even though I added cream to the squid eyeball stew, Rocky ignored his serving.
I got a spoon and ate it myself.

55. Practice:
Combine the sentences below, using a coordinating conjunction.
My favorite sport is speed walking.
I am state champion.

56. Usage:
When you are editing tonight and writing tomorrow, think of these notes.
Please use them to combine sentences in paragraph two, as you summarize.
When you proofread, look for ways to use pronoun references and places to insert coordinating conjunctions.
Doing this will improve your writing and can increase your grade.

57. Homework: Proofread your first two paragraphs AND quote sandwiches.
Look for any corrections with pronoun references or places you can add coordinating conjunctions.

59. Milk: Fire Safety: What Cavemen Did: Raking Leaves: Sushi:
Fire Safety:
What Cavemen Did:
Raking Leaves:
Sushi:

61. Milk: Fire Safety: What Cavemen Did: Raking Leaves: Sushi:
Fire Safety:
What Cavemen Did:
Raking Leaves:
Sushi:

62. Remaining Time (None):
For the remainder of the period, work on your rough draft.
Remember to complete the writing process.
Tomorrow is typing & Friday is peer review.
Revise your writing before publishing.

63. “For Your Health!” Homework:
Proofread your first two paragraphs AND quote sandwiches.
Look for any corrections with pronoun references or places you can add coordinating conjunctions.
Write ONE or TWO of your body paragraphs, the support of your thesis statement.
Pay attention to pronoun reference and coordinating conjunctions.
“For Your Health!”

64. Better Dr. Steve Lines. Body Odor Ice Cream 1:10 Prom 1:32 1:54
Ice Cream 1:10
Prom 1:32
1:54