1. Evaluate drafts of Paper 2 Revise (or begin revising) Paper 2
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Goal:
Evaluate drafts of Paper 2
Revise (or begin revising) Paper 2

4. Henry shows that Della and Jim are poor
Henry shows that Della and Jim are poor. This is clear when he says that they have a “shabby little couch.”
Henry shows that Della and Jim are poor when he says that they have a “shabby little couch.”
when Della flops down on her “shabby little couch.”
Henry shows Della and Jim’s poverty

5. Henry shows Della and Jim’s poverty early in the story.
We see it in the opening lines: “One dollar and eighty-seven cents. That was all.”
Della doesn’t have even two dollars to spend on a Christmas present,
so she flops down on her “shabby little couch” to “howl.”
(A woman of means might “cry,” but Della can only “howl.”)
And in case the couch escapes our attention, Henry notes that, while the flat might not “beggar description,” it might attract the attention of “the mendicancy squad.” Not only does the doorbell not work, but “no mortal finger could coax a ring” from it.
Each of the first four paragraphs reveals another detail of Della and Jim’s sad financial state.

6. The paper has a clear thesis that addresses the prompt.
In a paper no longer than two pages (using 12-point Times New Roman font and following MLA format), explain the strategies or techniques O. Henry uses in “The Gift of the Magi” to give emotional weight to the story’s climax.
Introduction
Body paragraph
Topic sentence
Topic sentence
Body paragraph
Body paragraph
Topic sentence
Topic sentence
Body paragraph
THESIS
The paper has a clear thesis that addresses the prompt.
Every paragraph has a topic sentence that supports the thesis.

7. Body paragraph Topic sentence (supports thesis)
Henry shows Della and Jim’s poverty early in the story. We see it in the opening lines: “One dollar and eighty-seven cents. That was all.” Della doesn’t have even two dollars to spend of a Christmas present, so she flops down on her “shabby little couch” to “howl.” (A woman of means might “cry,” but Della can only “howl.”) And in case the couch escapes our attention, Henry notes that, while the flat might not “beggar description,” it might attract the attention of “the mendicancy squad.” Not only does the doorbell not work, but “no mortal finger could coax a ring” from it. Each of the first four paragraphs reveals another detail of Della and Jim’s sad financial state.
Claim – evidence – explanation
More evidence as available
Connecting words as needed

8. Body paragraph Topic sentence (supports thesis)
Henry shows Della and Jim’s poverty early in the story. We see it in the opening lines: “One dollar and eighty-seven cents. That was all.” Della doesn’t have even two dollars to spend of a Christmas present, so she flops down on her “shabby little couch” to “howl.” (A woman of means might “cry,” but Della can only “howl.”) And in case the couch escapes our attention, Henry notes that, while the flat might not “beggar description,” it might attract the attention of “the mendicancy squad.” Not only does the doorbell not work, but “no mortal finger could coax a ring” from it. Each of the first four paragraphs reveals another detail of Della and Jim’s sad financial state.
Claim – evidence – explanation
More evidence as available
Connecting words as needed

9. Body paragraph Topic sentence (supports thesis)
Henry shows Della and Jim’s poverty early in the story. We see it in the opening lines: “One dollar and eighty-seven cents. That was all.” Della doesn’t have even two dollars to spend of a Christmas present, so she flops down on her “shabby little couch” to “howl.” (A woman of means might “cry,” but Della can only “howl.”) And in case the couch escapes our attention, Henry notes that, while the flat might not “beggar description,” it might attract the attention of “the mendicancy squad.” Not only does the doorbell not work, but “no mortal finger could coax a ring” from it. Each of the first four paragraphs reveals another detail of Della and Jim’s sad financial state.
Claim – evidence – explanation
More evidence as available
Connecting words as needed

10. Body paragraph Topic sentence (supports thesis)
Henry shows Della and Jim’s poverty early in the story. We see it in the opening lines: “One dollar and eighty-seven cents. That was all.” Della doesn’t have even two dollars to spend of a Christmas present, so she flops down on her “shabby little couch” to “howl.” (A woman of means might “cry,” but Della can only “howl.”) And in case the couch escapes our attention, Henry notes that, while the flat might not “beggar description,” it might attract the attention of “the mendicancy squad.” Not only does the doorbell not work, but “no mortal finger could coax a ring” from it. Each of the first four paragraphs reveals another detail of Della and Jim’s sad financial state.
Claim – evidence – explanation
More evidence as available
Connecting words as needed

11. Body paragraph Topic sentence (supports thesis)
Henry shows Della and Jim’s poverty early in the story. We see it in the opening lines: “One dollar and eighty-seven cents. That was all.” Della doesn’t have even two dollars to spend of a Christmas present, so she flops down on her “shabby little couch” to “howl.” (A woman of means might “cry,” but Della can only “howl.”) And in case the couch escapes our attention, Henry notes that, while the flat might not “beggar description,” it might attract the attention of “the mendicancy squad.” Not only does the doorbell not work, but “no mortal finger could coax a ring” from it. Each of the first four paragraphs reveals another detail of Della and Jim’s sad financial state.
Claim – evidence – explanation
More evidence as available
Connecting words as needed

12. O. Henry uses the contrast between the wealth of the Magi and the poverty of Della and Jim to add emotional weight to the story’s climax.
Henry shows Della and Jim’s poverty early in the story.
Everything of Della and Jim’s seems small, from the their furniture to Jim’s paycheck to even his name.
Having described Della and Jim’s poverty at some length, Henry uses allusions to Biblical magnificence to contrast their financial state with their two sources of pride.
The contrast between Sheba/Solomon and Della/Jim mirrors the contrast between Della’s hopes and her realization of what she has done.
Thus we see how Henry uses these contrasts to manipulate our emotions and make the climax even more powerful.

13. Aristotle’s “Five Offices of Rhetoric”
With a partner, work on whatever aspects of your paper most need attention.
Aristotle’s “Five Offices of Rhetoric”
Invention
Arrangement
Style
Memory
Delivery
Identify passages that create emotion.
Highlight key words.
Identify/describe the strategies & techniques.
Select the strongest or most effective ideas.
Put them in a logical order so that each one leads clearly to the next.
Insert “signposts” or “connecting words” to be sure the connections are clear.
Check sentences for completeness, correctness, and accuracy.
Cut any unnecessary words.
Make sure each word is precise & accurate.

14. QUESTIONS? Schedule… Today: bring a complete draft to class
2/ HW: revise your draft
Thursday: turn your final draft (hard copy) in class
2/ (Once you finish your draft, read “The Diamond Necklace.”)
QUESTIONS?