1. Proofing, Editing and Drafting Your Own Work
This workshop will...
Introduce you to the processes of drafting, editing and proofing
Identify and share a number of common errors people make in written papers
Provide tips on proof-reading effectively
Louise Livesey
Academic Skills Adviser
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The Plan…
What is the difference between drafting, editing and proofreading?
The three steps of editing
Proof-reading tips
Share the plan with attendees
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1. What is the difference….?
Draft
Edit (Revise)
Redraft
Proof
DO NOT CLICK ON NEXT ONE AS HAS ANSWERS
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4. 1. What is the difference….?
Activity 1: Editing or proof-reading job
Editing/Proofreading
E/P
1. Appropriateness of argument E
2. Grammar P
3. Position of ideas
4. Punctuation
5. Level of Formality
6. Order of sections
7. Spelling and typographical (italics, bold) errors
8. Word choice
Click for answer table
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5. 2.The three steps of editing
Step 1: Light touch
Step 2: The big questions
Structure
Relevance of arguments
Evidence
Step 3: Academic style
Third person
Unnecessary material
Long sentences
Long words
Strong nouns and verbs
Voice
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6. 2.The three steps of editing
Step 2: The big questions Introduction: outline of structure; interpreted task/? correctly; conclusion Structure: logical sequence; signposts; topic and transitional sentences Argument points: 1:2:1; clear Evidence: relevant; accurate; specific Conclusion: mirror; conclusions
Click for each
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7. 2.The three steps of editing
Step 3: Academic style Third person and detached Unnecessary material-Activity 2: word count Long sentences Long words Strong nouns and verbs Voice-passive
Click for each
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8. Activity 2: Word count edit
2.The three steps of editing
Activity 2: Word count edit
This essay attempts to evaluate the business model and e-strategy of web based business Amazon.co.uk. The company’s success of Amazon.co.uk will be analysed through different services that it offers to customers specially focusing on their online book service and z shops. It is based on the mixed research of articles and other literature obtained from different writers.
Before embarking on an approach to analysing the business model, there is a need to explore the its meaning of the business model. Paul Timmers (2000) has defines the business model as: “an architecture for product, service and information flows, including a description of the various business actors and their roles” (p.46).
Although there are different kinds of business models, but they have all got one thing in common: they are designed to make money for their owners in the long run.
Click for basic trim suggestions
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2.The three steps of editing
A. This essay evaluates the business model and e-strategy of Amazon.co.uk. Based on various literature types, the company’s success will be analysed through the different services it offers focusing on their online book service and z shops. Before analysing the business model, there is a need to explore its meaning. Timmers (2000) defines the business model as: “an architecture for product, service and information flows” (p.46). Although there are different kinds of models,they have one thing in common: they are designed to make money for their owners. B. Before analysing the business model, its meaning will be explored. Timmers (2000) has defined the business model as “an architecture for product, service and information flows” (p.46). Although there are different business models, they have one thing in common: they are designed to make money for their owners.
Click for A and Click for B
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3.Proof-reading tips
Take a break between writing and proof-reading
Proof-read when you are at your best
Proof-read backwards
Use resources
Ask someone else to read it
Know your usual mistakes
Use a ruler
One type of error at a time
Use the spell-checker CAREFULLY
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3.Proof-reading tips
Activity 3: Editing and proof-reading
In the second half of the ninteenth century as labour and information moved more rapidly and easily across borders new pressures for change were generated bringing with them unprecedented social and cultural fragmentation rarely seen before. Metropolises grew at inconceivable rates into vast cities drawing workers in from the countryside to interact with the new foreign migrant labour flooding in from all over Europe, developing a new urbane, cosmopoltan culture, fuelled by rising literacy and a popular press with mass readership. Not only were traditional social classes changing with movement up and down the social structure, but I found that cultures and traditional customs were being threatened by an exodus away from the rural areas in to cities, and by international, cosmopolitan influences that flowed across borders.
Click for basic amendments to text with emboldened words
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Suggested answer
In the second half of the nineteenth century as labour and information swept across borders, new pressures for change were generated, bringing with them unprecedented social and cultural fragmentation. Towns grew at inconceivable rates into vast cities drawing workers in from the countryside to interact with the foreign labour flooding in from all over Europe. Here a new cosmopolitan culture developed, fuelled by rising literacy and a popular mass press. Not only were traditional social classes changing with movement up and down the social structure, but cultures and customs were being threatened by movement away from the countryside in to cities, and by cosmopolitan influences that flowed across borders.
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The forces of uniformity in tastes, culture and fasion that touched just about every European society that engaged in trade and commerce were fuelled by the revolution in communications alone. Consumers demanded the best of what they bought irrespective of where it was demanded the best of what they bought irrespective of where it was produced, so architecture, clothes and fashions were discovered to be increasingly the same and, except where they were consciously prolonged, national syles slowly faded. Evn in the 1930s it was already apparent that a time was approaching when it would be impossible to tell one country’s towns and cities from another and, add to th is the impact of dance music, the cinema and the wireless, even the cheap recreational literature that more and more drew its inspiration from the US, and it became clear to a growing number of people that their social and cultural identitiy, once a source of patriotic pride and a sense of belonging, was disappearing beneath a uniform, cosmopolitan culture, that was constantly changing.
Click for basic answers with emboldened terms
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3.Proof-reading tips
Suggested answer
The revolution in communications was fuelling forces for uniformity in tastes, culture and fashion that touched just about every European society that engaged in commerce. Consumers demanded the best product irrespective of where it was made. Architecture, clothes and fashions were increasingly the same, and, except where they were consciously prolonged, national styles slowly faded. Even in the 1930s, it was already apparent that a time was approaching when it would be impossible to tell one country’s towns and cities from another. Other impacts included dance music, the cinema, the wireless, and even the cheap recreational literature that increasingly drew its inspiration from the US. It became clear to a growing number, that their social and cultural identity, once a source of patriotic pride and a sense of belonging, was disappearing beneath a constantly-changing yet uniform, cosmopolitan culture.
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References
Cottrell, S. (2013) The study skills handbook. 4th ed. Basingstoke, Palgrave Macmillan.
Greetham, B. (2013) How to write better essays. 3rd ed. Basingstoke, Palgrave Macmillan.
Redman, P. (2001) Good essay writing. 2nd ed. London, Sage Publications Ltd.
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16. Academic Skills Advice Service
Where are we? Chesham Building B0.23. Give us a call or come speak to us Monday-Thursday 10am-12pm and 1pm-4pm
Who am I? Louise, the dedicated workshop adviser.
Who can help me with study and writing skills? Lucy and Russell run Instant Study Skills Advice sessions Monday-Thursday and Writing Skills Clinics twice a week. You can also access self-help resources on our webpage.
Who can give me maths advice? Helen and Michael specialise in Maths support for students though clinics and pre-booked appointments.
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Any questions?
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