1. Revision for Detail
You are to take the rough draft of your paper and revise it for detail by using nouns, verbs, participles, absolutes, adjectives, appositives, and prepositional phrases. This presentation will take you through a model.
Image Grammar: Teaching Grammar as Part of the Writing Process Harry Noden

2. Original Draft
A creature went quietly through the weeds. Near the edge of a place, it saw a small animal. The creature went closer. A large animal saw the creature and made a loud noise. The creature went back into the grass and waited. But the chance to get the animal never came.

3. Add Specific Nouns
A lioness went quietly through the savanna. Near the edge of a waterhole, it saw a small baby elephant. The lioness went closer. A large elephant saw the lioness and made a loud roar. The lioness went back into the savanna and waited, but the opportunity to get the baby elephant never came.

4. Add Specific Verbs
A lioness crept quietly through the savanna. Near the edge of a waterhole, it spotted a small baby elephant. The lioness crawled closer. A large elephant discovered the lioness and erupted in a loud roar. The lioness retreated back into the savanna and waited, but the opportunity to kill the baby elephant never arrived.

5. Add Participles
Searching for food, a lioness crept quietly through the savanna. Near the edge of a waterhole, it spotted a small baby elephant. The lioness crawled closer. A large elephant discovered the lioness and erupted in a loud roar. The lioness retreated back into the savanna and waited, but the opportunity to kill the baby elephant never arrived.

6. Add Absolutes
Searching for food, a lioness crept quietly through the savanna. Near the edge of a waterhole, it spotted a small baby elephant. The lioness crawled closer, teeth grinding in anticipation, body slinking close to the ground. A large elephant discovered the lioness and erupted in a loud roar. The lioness retreated back into the savanna and waited, but the opportunity to kill the baby elephant never arrived.

7. Add Adjectives
Searching for food, a lioness crept quietly through the savanna. Near the edge of a waterhole, it spotted a sickly baby elephant, frightened and lost. The hungry lioness crawled closer, teeth grinding in anticipation, body slinking close to the ground. An enormous bull elephant discovered the lioness and erupted in a deafening roar. The startled lioness retreated back into the savanna and waited, but the opportunity to kill the baby elephant never arrived.

8. Add Appositive
Searching for food, a lioness crept quietly through the savanna, a rolling grassland scattered with trees and shrubs. Near the edge of a waterhole, it spotted a sickly baby elephant, frightened and lost. The hungry lioness crawled closer, teeth grinding in anticipation, body slinking close to the ground. An enormous bull elephant discovered the lioness and erupted in a deafening roared. The startled lioness retreated back into the savanna and waited, but the opportunity to kill the baby elephant never arrived.

9. Add Prepositional Phrase
Searching for food, a lioness crept quietly through the savanna, a rolling grassland scattered with trees and shrubs. Near the edge of a waterhole, it spotted a sickly baby elephant, frightened and lost. The hungry lioness crawled closer, teeth grinding in anticipation, body slinking close to the ground. An enormous bull elephant discovered the lioness and erupted in a deafening roar. The startled lioness retreated back into the savanna and waited for darkness to fall, but the opportunity to kill the baby elephant never arrived.

10. Comparison
Original: A creature went quietly through the weeds. Near the edge of a place, it saw a small animal. The creature went closer. A large animal saw the creature and made a loud noise. The creature went back into the grass and waited. But the chance to get the animal never came.
Final:
Searching for food, a lioness crept quietly through the savanna, a rolling grassland scattered with trees and shrubs. Near the edge of a waterhole, it spotted a sickly baby elephant, frightened and lost. The hungry lioness crawled closer, teeth grinding in anticipation, body slinking close to the ground. An enormous bull elephant discovered the lioness and erupted in a deafening roar. The startled lioness retreated back into the savanna and waited for darkness to fall, but the opportunity to kill the baby elephant never arrived.