1. Yr 10 exam paper 1: Whole class feedback
Sunday, 11 November 2018

2. Strengths Genuine attempts to respond to the unseen poem
Good use of direct speech to enliven the creative writing – not universal
A visible improvement in the use of Tier 2 vocabulary on a regular basis
Speech task well addressed with good awareness of audience

3. Weaknesses to be addressed
Creative
Poetry
Opening paragraph ‘there I stood…’
Omission of ? In RQs
Overlong and run on sentences
Paragraphing
No evident link to the picture stimulus
Lack of sentence variety
Anonymous friends
Colon use
legibility
Device spotting with little awareness of effect
Planning
Assertions rather than explanation
Stating the obvious
Missed metaphor – everything is taken as literal
Imposing ideas on the poem
Lack of sensible structure to the response

4. To share Elias: Paragraph 2 Haaris: story paragraph 1
Folu: anadiplosis!!
Tom: Opening paragraphs
Gur: Planning
Rayaan: page 2
Timi: plan for poem
Ethan: opening of story
Shiv: story… paragraphing? Or, how to lose full marks!

5. Stars: Shiv: A wonderful story
Ethan: distinctive voice in storytelling
Haaris: focus on effect in poem opening
Tom: sense of narrative flow
Elias:
Vocab and images
Rayaan: quantity
Frankie: excellent story, tone and content

6. PAPER 2… Strengths For many, sheer quantity
NO quotations in question 2
Explanation evident in Q 3 – This was generally very well written
Quality of knowledge of Explorers or boys

7. Weaknesses to be addressed
TIME – several did not finish. IN the real examination this will affect the overall time on the paper. We will look at this next term in more detail.
Lack of Awareness of context of creation in Q4 and 5.
LEGIBILITY
NO explanation of assertions in longer answers
Inaccurate reading of the text
Failure to plan or annotate
Lack of recognition of Shackleton
Miscomprehension of the diary

8. To share Not so many as much was very similar… Shivam Q2 and 3
Boris Q2 – lack of explanation
Bailey Q3 response

9. Stars
Shivam
Francis
Keeran
Bailey