1. A writer only begins a book. A reader finishes it.” - Samuel Johnson
AGENDA
-Bellwork—Paper Self Review for content
-Peer Review
-Revising Goals
-HW: Think about draft changes
Self analyze essay for ideas, content, organization, voice, word choice, strong verbs. Identify strong and weak areas.
Peer analyze essay for ideas, content, organization, voice, word choice, strong verbs. Identify strong and weak areas.
A writer only begins a book. A reader finishes it.” - Samuel Johnson
8 Nov. 2012

2. Bellwork—Self Analyze 11/8/12
On the last page of your essay, write what you were trying to say with this essay. One direct statement of purpose is all you need. (this should sound somewhat like your thesis)
On the last page, write specific things you want help with.
On the Yellow sheet, complete the whole column for “Author’s Comments”
Comment on these rows: ideas & content; organization; voice; word choice
Use language from the descriptions
If appropriate, mention particular parts from your essay
On the side of the white page, write at least one specific question for your editors

3. Revising—What to focus on

4. Revising vs. Editing
Re+vision—Revision means to see again with new eyes
Today we focus on REVISING—Internal Structure
Focus on
Revise
Focus on Internal Structure
Ideas, content, organization, word choice, strong verbs, voice,
Edit
Focus on External Sheen
Grammar, punctuation, sentence structure, eliminating weak verbs and weak words.

5. Peer Revising
Trade papers and yellow sheets. Read the question the author wrote on the bottom of the page, and read what they say their purpose is on the last page of their essay
Read their paper through once, writing all over the essay (don’t fill in the yellow sheet yet)
Ask questions at parts you don’t understand
Write suggestions for improvement
Identify parts you like or think are strong
Tell them whether or not they achieved their purpose as stated on the last page of their essay
Go back to the yellow sheet. Write your name in the “Editor’s Comments” Column & using specific language from the descriptions, give them feedback in each category. Skim over their essay as you need to in order to cite specific areas in your comments. Answer their question at the bottom of the page.

6. Reflection
On the back of your essay, consider the following and write your responses down:
Did your editor think you achieved your purpose? Why or why not?
What are you going to do to improve your weaker areas?
What, if anything, do you think you still need help on?
What questions do you have before you turn this in on Monday?