1. Voice Lesson: Syntax #5

2. Read and Think:
He found that he was often angry, now: irrationally angry at his groupmates, that they were satisfied with their lives which had none of the vibrance his own was taking on.
-- Lois Lowry, The Giver
Analyze the syntax in the passage.
Consider the following hints to guide your response:
Use of colon
Consider order of sentence
*Your response should use C-E-I format.

3. Responses
Lowry uses syntax to communicate the emotions of the character. She places the word now after the word angry using it to emphasize the emotion and the immediacy of the character’s anger. The order of the sentence shifts the emphasis to the first part of the sentence stressing the anger rather than the reasons for the anger. Then, she uses a colon that tells the reader the depth of the character’s anger and places importance that emotion. The order of the part of the sentence that comes after the colon emphasizes the emotion more than the reasons for the anger and also places the power and focus on it.
How could this response be improved?