1. S.T.A.R. method of Revision From Kelly Gallagher’s book: Teaching Adolescent Writers

2. S – Substitute T – Take things out A – Add R – Rearrange
S.T.A.R
S – Substitute T – Take things out A – Add R – Rearrange
A colleague of Kelly Gallagher’s gave it this name – Richard Cornell
4 major ways a writer can transform a piece of writing

3. Substitute Replace: Overused words Weak verbs with strong verbs
Weak adjectives with strong adjectives
Common nouns with proper nouns
“dead” words
Substitute or replace

4. Take Out Take out: Unnecessary repetitions
Unimportant or irrelevant information
Parts that might belong in another piece

5. Add Add: Detail Description New information Figurative language
Development
Clarification of meanings
Expanded ideas

6. Rearrange Rearrange: The sequence to produce a desired effect
The order for a more logical flow

8. References
Teaching Adolescent Writers by Kelly Gallagher