1. Style in Technical Communication
Revising Nouns
Style in Technical Communication

2. Revising Nouns

3. Repeated Nouns 2
These fire shutters and doors are rated 1-1/2 hours. The rating is the nominal length of time which they should contain a fire.

4. Repeated Nouns 2
These fire shutters and doors are rated 1-1/2 hours, the nominal time they should contain a fire.

5. Clause Phrase 2
My laptop is a MacBook Pro. My MacBook Pro laptop…

6. Clause Phrase 2
boat that was churning churning boat

7. Phrase Word 2
do away completely abolish went very slowly crawled made apology for apologized

8. Abstract Concrete 2
relative, minimum, good, bad, normal, high, low, new reduced 4.1%, 3000 rat traps per month

9. General Specific 2
boring hundreds of feet in a number of weeks boring 745 feet/week for 20 weeks

10. General Specific 2
large water tunnel a long ways in soft rock under one of our major cities a 22 ft. diameter water tunnel 5-1/2 miles in sandstone under Los Angeles.

11. General Specific 2
The enrollment was very disappointing. Last year we had 6000 by the second day of registration, this year only 5500.