1. Style / Register

2. Academic do’s and don’ts
Which of these are academic / Not academic?
Passive
could / might
I think
Smith says
It has been argued
This shows
but / too
However, / In addition,
Smith argues
Academic
Not Academic

3. Academic do’s and don’ts
Which of these are academic / Not academic?
Passive
could / might
I think
Phrasal Verbs
Smith says
It has been argued
This shows
but / too
However, / In addition,
Smith argues
For me
Academic
passive
Could / might
It has been argued
This shows
However, / In addition
Smith argues
Not Academic
I think
But too
Smith says
For me
Phrasal verbs

4. Practice
Using what we have just seen, what is wrong with this sentence?
In this essay I’m going to try to look at why healthcare with robots is not really a very good thing in my opinion.

5. Practice
Using what we have just seen, what is wrong with this sentence?
In this essay I’m going to try to look at why healthcare with robots is not really a very good thing in my opinion.
Red - subjective
Blue – vague
Green – phrasal verb / vocab / register

6. Rewrite Now rewrite this sentence:
In this essay I’m going to try to look at why healthcare with robots is not really a very good thing in my opinion.

7. Which information is unnecessary?
What is wrong here?
The example of Paro, which is really cute, makes us see how a robot is used in an old people’s home. This is good. All old people need Paro. Some people think that Paro is not helpful for old people.
Which information is unnecessary?

8. Which information is unnecessary?
What is wrong here?
The example of Paro, which is really cute, makes us see how a robot is used in an old people’s home. This is good. All old people need Paro. Some people think that Paro is not helpful for old people.
Which information is unnecessary?

9. Which information should be hedged?
What is wrong here?
The example of Paro, which is really cute, makes us see how a robot is used in an old people’s home. This is good. All old people need Paro. Some people think that Paro is not helpful for old people.
Which information should be hedged?

10. Which information should be hedged?
What is wrong here?
The example of Paro, which is really cute, makes us see how a robot is used in an old people’s home. This is good. All old people need Paro. Some people think that Paro is not helpful for old people.
Which information should be hedged?

11. Which information is vague?
What is wrong here?
The example of Paro, which is really cute, makes us see how a robot is used in an old people’s home. This is good. All old people need Paro. Some people think that Paro is not helpful for old people.
Which information is vague?

12. Which information is vague?
What is wrong here?
The example of Paro, which is really cute, makes us see how a robot is used in an old people’s home. This is good. All old people need Paro. Some people think that Paro is not helpful for old people.
Which information is vague?

13. Which linking device could be used here?
What is wrong here?
The example of Paro, which is really cute, makes us see how a robot is used in an old people’s home. This is good. All old people need Paro. Some people think that Paro is not helpful for old people.
Which linking device could be used here?

14. Which linking device could be used here?
What is wrong here?
The example of Paro, which is really cute, makes us see how a robot is used in an old people’s home. This is good. All old people need Paro. However, some people think that Paro is not helpful for old people.
Which linking device could be used here?

15. What is wrong here?
The example of Paro, which is really cute, makes us see how a robot is used in an old people’s home. This is good. All old people need Paro. However, some people think that Paro is not helpful for old people.
What else could be changed here to improve it?
Now rewrite and add in all the changes