1. College App Essay Peer Revision
Word count
Check MLA Format (see next slide)
Avoid ‘you’
Proper Nouns
Possessives
Does your essay address the prompt?
Where? (highlight)
Where do you talk about, and give examples of, your strengths (that would make you a great college student)
Did you use formal diction throughout the essay?

2. Smith 1 Alexa Smith Ms. Zumwalt English September 2017 New paragraphs are indented and the essay is double spaced.

3. College App Essay Revision and Peer Edit
Check your own paper for the following:
Find and underline all the variations of to be in one of your average sized paragraphs:
Try to change these to strong active verb
Find and underline the following dead words: to get, to have, to go, a lot, very. Try to replace these with strong words.
Find and underline general nouns in your essay like something, thing, and try to replace these with specific nouns.
Sensory Detail: read your paper through one more time and add more detail (color, size, shape, number, type, smell, etc.) to bring your images into better focus in the reader’s mind.
Find all the variations of get/got and improve with better verbs.

4. College App Essay Peer Revision (cont.)
Wherever you find the word “it,” make sure the author has said what ‘it’ is.
Make sure there is NOT more than one “and” in a sentence. This often indicates a run-on; even if not, it is overused.
Circle misspelled words.
Read the paper aloud and mark places that are awkward in any way.
Mark sentence fragments and run-ons.
Have you used: sentences starting with a verb? Semi-colons? The dash? Short sentences for emphasis?
Parallel structure?
Do verbs stay in the same tense?
Does EVERY SINGLE DETAIL contribute to the point? What needs to be added/taken away?
Does the introduction capture your attention? If not, offer suggestions to the author.
Does the conclusion leave you satisfied OR are you bored? Offer suggestions to the author.