1. Prompt
Which culture would provide more opportunities for its residents to be happy & successful?

2. Now assess your own thesis statement

3. “best” or other simple words Extra words
Thesis “no”s
“I”
“best” or other simple words
Extra words

4. Thesis Statement Components Label on yours.
All thesis statement should include three main components
1. Arguable
Must be debatable
Must be able to be supported with FACTS/QUOTES
2. Specific Argument Detail
How? & Why?
3. Argument Depth
So what?

5. Lists
Egypt was able to develop a strong, complex civilization because it had strong leadership, many festivals, and advanced technology.
Did you learn to write thesis statements like this?
How would you rate this? (out of 4)

6. Lists: the 3-point formula
Egypt was able to develop a strong, complex civilization because it had strong leadership, many festivals, and advanced technology.
Listing thesis statements are 3/4 (if they are accurate).
This is a good place to start.
There is no formula to go from a 3 to a 4. You have to get creative with your sentence structure and you have to introduce complexity (How does it work? Why?)

7. Creative Thesis!
Egypt’s complex, advanced technology ensured the most people possible experienced edifying personal success. There is no formula to go from a 3 to a 4. You have to get creative with your sentence structure and you have to introduce complexity (How does it work? Why?)

8. Evidence (outside research needed) Analysis Conclusion
Paragraphs
Your academic writing should include:
Thesis statement
Evidence (outside research needed)
Analysis
Conclusion

10. Prompt
Which culture would provide more opportunities for its residents to be happy & successful?

11. Draft Grading (10 writing points)
4 pts for a submission to turnitin.com on time
(-1 if it’s not titled creatively)
3 pt for 3 in-text citations
2 pts for MLA style
1 pt for length, between ½ and 1 page