1. CW Paper Two Feedback Tuesday, 01 January 2019
Learning Outcomes
To be able to improve my performance in a Paper Two question based upon individual and class feedback

2. READING AND PLANNING: 15 minutes
Read the main focus of the questions first
Read the two texts carefully with a pen / highlighter
Question One: Choose four statements which are true…
Advice:
Shade within the box carefully
Read the statements carefully

4. Question Two: Write a summary of similarities / differences of…
THE BIG PICTURE: Sum up a response in one or two sentences.
Both texts……..Source A…….. Whereas Source B…………
Statement about Source A
QUOTE: NO METHODS!
Evaluate Quote using INFERENCE
Comparison Marker
Statement about Source B

5. You need to refer to Source A and Source B for this question.
The effects of the weather on people in both sources are very different.
Use details from both sources to write a summary of the different ways people are affected by the weather.
[8 marks]
Both texts are about extreme weather conditions. Source A shows the horrifying consequences of a sudden storm on Mount Everest, while Source B focuses on less dramatic heavy snowfall in London in the 1800s.
Effects on people:
Source A: Source B:
People fight for their lives after becoming trapped
Whereas
Physical effects include – frozen beards, headaches and cold fingers – an inconvenience rather than a danger.
People have been taken by surprised and are unprepared - e.g. running out of oxygen supplies
People are very cold and have to wear warmer clothes – however, this is not life threatening.

6. Question Three: How does the writer use language to…
THE BIG PICTURE: Sum up a response in one or two sentences…
NAME METHOD The writer uses…
E.g. The word/adjective/adverb
Verb/simile/Metaphor/Repetition/
Personification/Oxymoron/Questions/
Exclamations/Alliteration etc.
QUOTE
Evaluate Quote using inference
This suggests/implies/ gives the impression/ emphasises

7. You now need to refer only to Source A from lines 13 to 23.
How does the writer use language to describe the storm?
[12 marks]

8. Don’t forget your “Big Picture” Summary.
E.g.
The writer presents the weather as an extremely frightening , dangerous and destructive force, which the climbers are totally unprepared for.
Now use the Formula:
NAME METHOD – QUOTE - Evaluate Quote using inference
Some ideas you could have included:
Extended metaphor of violence / lexical field of violence
Powerful verbs
Personification of the storm

9. Question Four: Compare how the two writer convey their different attitudes to …
THE BIG PICTURE: Sum up a response in one or two sentences.
Both texts……..Source A…….. Whereas Source B…………
POINT about an experience/attitude expressed by the writer in Source A
METHOD And QUOTE
This suggests/implies/ gives the impression…..
USE INFERENCE
POINT about an experience/attitude expressed
by the writer in Source B
This suggests/implies/ gives the impression…..USE INFERENCE

10. For this question, you need to refer to the whole of Source A, together with the whole of Source B.
Compare how the writers convey their different perspectives on the extreme weather conditions.
In your answer, you could:
compare their different perspectives on the extreme weather conditions
compare the methods the writers use to convey their different perspectives
support your response with references to both texts.

11. How do they view it / Point of View
Compare how the writers convey their different perspectives on the extreme weather conditions.
Key Focus
How do they view it / Point of View
Big Picture:
In both texts the writers are describing the weather but they have very contrasting perspectives.
Source A Source B
First person, factual account
First person account, diary entry
He conveys a strong sense of fear and vulnerability
The writer seems to feel peaceful and thoughtful
The writer wants to emphasise the sense of danger
The writer emphasise the beauty of the snow
Methods:
Personification of the storm
Onomatopoeia
Metaphor
Adjectives
Contrast
Sensory language

12. Exemplar Top mark Answer