1. Goth Girl - Using dialogue to tell the story and give clues
Tell a partner what you know about punctuating dialogue.
Unit 5 Day 4
Y5 Fiction: Goth Girl

2. Using Dialogue to tell the story and give clues
Good writers vary the way that they depict action and describe characters.
Sometimes they describe what has happened…
The celebrity chef took a scoop of mustard and dropped it into the cake mix. She had not noticed Mrs Beat’em standing silently behind the great iron range.
Telling
Instead of saying that Mrs Beat’em felt very angry, how could we show it in her speech?
“I will boil you into a pudding, you good-for-nothing scoundrel!” roared Mrs Beat’em as she swung a rolling pin around her head. “You will wish you had never heard of Ghastly-Gorm Kitchens!”
Showing

3. Using Dialogue to tell the story and give clues
Sometimes, we can break up lots of action by adding dialogue.
It still advances the action but in a different way.
Ada and Arthur were stuck in the cellar of the sensible folly. Arthur rattled the handle but it would not turn. Then Ada tried to prise open the door with her sharp-tipped umbrella. It snapped off. Arthur began to panic because he did not like the dark.
What speech could replace some of this action?
“We’re stuck,” cried Arthur rattling the handle of the sensible folly.
“Maybe I can prise open the door with my umbrella,” said Ada. The sharp tip snapped.
Arthur began to panic, “I…I’m not very good with the dark.”
Try this today in your own writing.