1. The Ghost of Thomas Kempe
Lesson 14

2. To understand how to structure an effective response using P.E.E.
Lesson Objective
To understand how to structure an effective response using P.E.E.

3. What makes a good Response?
Starter
What makes a good
Response?
You have been asked to explain writing a P.E.E. paragraph to a year 6 student. What tips would you give to them about:
Writing an effective point
Finding and using quotes
Explaining quotes and clarifying your response

4. How you will be assessed
Level
Criteria 3
You show you understand the main ideas. You realise that the story is organised in a certain way, and can make a personal comment about why. 4
You can sometimes show that you understand less obvious meanings in a text. You can identify some of the features used to organise the story. You are sometimes aware of the effect language has on the reader. 5
You can select evidence and explain different meanings. You are generally aware of how the story has been organised for a purpose, and can identify how the writer presents their viewpoint and why. 6
You can identify and discuss different layers of meaning using well chosen quotes. You can comment on the way the story is organised for a purpose and can explain ways in which the writer’s purposes and viewpoint are conveyed with close detail to the text.

5. Which blob would you choose to describe your ability to write using P
Which blob would you choose to describe your ability to write using P.E.E?

6. Assessment Task
You are to write an essay, using P.E.E, that answers the following question: How does Penelope Lively create a feeling of tension and suspense in the prologue of ‘The Ghost of Thomas Kempe’?

7. How to structure your response
Introduction
First quote
Second quote
Third quote
Conclusion

8. Quote Quest
Using the prologue, find and highlight at least three quotes that you think build a feeling of tension and suspense. These quotes will become the basis of your response, so make sure you can confidently explain them!

9. Share your quotes with the person next to you
Share your quotes with the person next to you. Discuss why you think they’re effective quotes to use. You may wish to revise your own choices, based on your sharing.
Record three quotes you’d like to use for your essay in your book.

10. P: Lively creates tension and suspense by…
Using one of your quotes, write a P.E.E paragraph that answers the essay question.
How does Penelope Lively create a feeling of tension and suspense in the prologue of ‘The Ghost of Thomas Kempe’?
P: Lively creates tension and suspense by…
E: For example, she describes how…
E: This shows that…

11. /4 I really liked … (The quote you used)
Swap responses with someone sat near you.
Read through their paragraph. Give one mark for each of the following:
1) Their point was clear and easy to understand
2) They used a quote
3)The quote had no spelling or punctuation errors (they used quotation marks, capital letters for names, commas where necessary, etc)
4) Their explanation is detailed and makes sense /4
I really liked … (The quote you used)
I think you should try to… (explain your quote
with more detail)

12. Self assessment
Using the grade criteria given to you, highlight the level you feel your work falls into.
Look at the level above. What can you do to reach that level?
Give yourself one target for improvement.

13. Which blob would you choose to describe your ability to write an effective P.E.E paragraph?