1. Flow and rhythm in your writing.
Smooth Fluency
Flow and rhythm in your writing.

2. 1. My sentences begin in different ways.
Bad example: Jordan was a very handsome boy. Jordan had blue eyes. Jordan liked to smile because he had white teeth. Jordan was really tall. Jordan had black hair that was short. Jordan didn’t have any zits.
Good example: I always thought that Jordan was a dream. His eyes were a deep azure blue that could make a girl think she had found heaven. Thick, ebony hair, a tall, lithe form and a perfect complexion made Jordan impossible to ignore when he walked by. Yet, it wasn’t just his striking good looks that made one stop and stare; it was the way he smiled at everyone. When Jordan smiled, it was as if the world stood still for that moment…he was truly amazing.

3. 2. Some sentences are short; some are long.
Bad: I like the color blue. It is a cool color. My friend likes red. I think he is weird. Red is okay. Blue is cool. Blue is like the sky. Red is like blood. I don’t like blood. Blood is gross. I like the sky. It is blue. OR
I like the color blue but my friend likes the color red and I think he is very weird because red is just okay and blue is better than red. Blue is like the sky but red is like blood and I don’t like blood because it is gross but I do like the sky because it is cool and that is why I like the color blue.
Good: I really like the color blue. Ever since I was little, blue has been my favorite color because it reminds me of the sky. My best friend likes the color red. I guess red is an okay color. I suppose that I don’t like red as much because it reminds me of blood and blood is pretty gross. I think that I will just stick with the color blue. The way I see it, blue is a pretty cool color.

4. 3. It just sounds good when I read it out loud…it flows!
Bad: The coach was coming in into the town. People was afraid. They knew that the new good sheriff was a coming and there would be a shoot-out with Doc Matson, the bad no-good outlaw who was a bad guy. It had been a scary summer cuz of all the crimes he had done to anybody. Would it get safer? People hoped it would get most safer.
Good: The people watched as the stage-coach pulled into the dusty town. Each man, woman and child knew that trouble was about to begin. Riding on the stage was the new sheriff…a man who had promised to rid the West of the notorious outlaw, Doc Matson. Would their town finally be safe? Or would this new stranger make their town an even bloodier place to live?

5. 4. My sentences have power and punch!
Bad: The graveyard was scary. IT was dark but the moon was shining. Any moment I thought a ghost would pop up and I would die of being scared. I made my way towards the grave and even started shaking.
Good: The graveyard was deathly silent as I walked into the midst of tombs. Moonlight pierced the darkness around me, making the graves glow with an eerie, silver light. My mind was numb with fear as I half expected a ghostly apparition to appear at any moment. My entire body began to tremble, not from the cold, but from the extreme terror of my thoughts as I approached the forbidden tomb.

6. 5. I have sentence sense (common sense about how sentences should sound).
Bad: I like dogs. Sometimes I play with my brother. My brother has was a dog when we were small. Small dogs are fun. My brother is a big person and is not small. When was little he was small even though he was still bigger than me. I have never been afraid of him because we share our new puppy. My dog barks all the time.
Good: My older brother is one of my best friends. Sure, we fight sometimes, but who doesn’t? He is quite a bit bigger than I am, but he has never been mean to me although I can be a pest. Since we get along so well, it has been fun for us to share our Christmas gift this year. We got a new puppy! Our dog is named ‘Dixie’ and even though she barks all the time, we really like her. I have never had a dog before, but my brother had one when he was little. He says that Dixie is a good dog and I agree.

7. Your Turn…
Read over your “Rough Draft #2” and look for ways to implement these five rules into your paper.
Write your corrections in the margins, erase or scribble out old things and write in improvements.
Underline sentences that could be more descriptive.
Circle words that could be more powerful.
Find a place to add alliteration, a dash, and an ellipsis.
USE A DIFFERENT WRITING TOOL SO I CAN SEE WHAT YOU CHANGE!

8. Clear Presentation
“Wow! That looks good!”

9. 1. The layout of my work helps the flow of ideas.
Paragraphs are clear
Order is recognizable for the kind of writing presented:
Recipe
Poem
Short story
Newspaper article
Etc.

10. 2. Margins frame my work
Simple! At least .5” margins; no more than 1 ½”.

11. 3. I have used effective Fonts.
Effective (easy to read):
Lovely
Happy
Orange
Not Effective (too hard to read):

12. 4. My layout is easy on the eyes.
Bad Example
Good Example
“Murder Or Be Murdered” Don’t be a murderer like me For you shall see That you will pay a fee Not a fee of money For money is funny But a fee of pain For your blood will drain Murder or be murdered Is murder the lesser of the two evils?
“Murder Or Be Murdered”
Don’t be a murderer like me
For you shall see
That you will pay a fee
Not a fee of money
For money is funny
But a fee of pain
For your blood will drain
Murder or be murdered
Is murder the lesser of the two evils?

13. 5. My pictures and graphs connect with the text.
Bad Example:
Newspaper article with the headline:
HUNTING SEASON BEGINS!
**See how the picture does NOT match with the headline?

14. 6. If handwritten… Handwriting is neat and easy to read.
Black or blue ink.

15. 7. Looks good and like you took pride In your work.
I can tell you are proud of what you did because the final product looks neat, well thought out and professional.

16. Your Turn:
In the computer lab, you will be typing up your “Voice” rough drafts.
Add a fun font, clip-art or anything you need to in order to make it your own.
Make sure you look over it BEFORE PRINTING for any incorrect punctuation or spelling.
Your name should be small and in the top, right corner. No need for period, date or teacher.
*This paper should reflect your personality! Print it on funky paper, add pictures…whatever helps reflect who you are!