1. Adding specificity to our IV, II-III bird imagery thesis statements

2. Focused, specific, and clear sentence
Thesis Excellence
Focused, specific, and clear sentence
Thesis insightfully addresses prompt
Argument has depth and complexity

3. Revising theses how + what + SO-what
How can we revise this thesis to be more complete, specific, and impactful? What should be added and what can be removed?
In act 4 scenes II and III of Shakespeare’s Macbeth, the frequency of bird imagery decreases showing the change from Macduff being cowardly to Macduff being a hero.

4. Revising theses how + what + SO-what
In act 4 scenes II and III of Shakespeare’s Macbeth, the frequency of bird imagery decreases showing the change from Macduff being cowardly to Macduff being a hero. (So what?)

5. How can we revise this thesis to be more complete, specific, and impactful? What should be added and what can be removed?
Suggested Revision: In Macbeth, Shakespeare uses fewer bird images as Act IV progresses, shifting Macduff’s characterization from cowardly to heroic, foreshadowing Malcom’s coronation. (21 words)
Original Thesis: In act 4 scenes II and III of Shakespeare’s Macbeth, the frequency of bird imagery decreases showing the change from Macduff being cowardly to Macduff being a hero. (28 words)

6. Revising theses how + what + SO-what
How can we revise this thesis to be more complete, specific, and impactful? What should be added and what can be removed?
Shakespeare uses bird imagery in Act 4 of Macbeth to illustrate the connections between characters and bird-like traits, which gives the audience a better understanding of interpersonal dynamics.

7. Revising theses how + what + SO-what
How can we revise this thesis to be more complete, specific, and impactful? What should be added and what can be removed?
Shakespeare uses bird imagery in Act 4 of Macbeth to illustrate the connections between characters and bird-like traits, which gives the audience a better understanding of interpersonal dynamics.

8. Revising theses how + what + SO-what
How can we revise this thesis to be more complete, specific, and impactful? What should be added and what can be removed?
Shakespeare’s bird imagery illustrates the Macduffs’ bird-like vulnerability, revealing the imbalance of power between the righteous Macduffs and the tyrannous Macbeths. (22 words)
Original Thesis: Shakespeare uses bird imagery in Act 4 of Macbeth to illustrate the connections between characters and bird-like traits, which gives the audience a better understanding of interpersonal dynamics. (29 words)