1. WABOLL (What A Bad One Looks Like)
Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
WABOLL (What A Bad One Looks Like)
The fire is hot and there’s lots of smoke. The fireman looks like the water’s cooling him down. The truck is on fire.
The abysmal abyss, the void of shadows eloquently erupts, evolving into an absence.
Sandra was tall and slim with long blonde hair and blue eyes.
He was a deadly ninja assassin who’d been told to kill the presidents of two countries using his deadly skills. Chris Steel dropped from the helicopter clutching all his guns and knives…
The orcs had over-run the camp, feasting on human flesh with their goblin allies. The wizards had been unable to turn the tide of battle
The space-ship zoomed across the horizon, lasers flashing as they zapped the aliens from the sky, their tentacles landing sizzling on the planet below.
Mandy was sad. She felt insecure because of the bullies. They’d ruined every day of her life until she felt like crying inside. She knew she was special, but no-one seemed to understand her.
What’s WRONG with these examples?

2. Paper 1 Section B / Description
Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Language P1, Question 5
Paper 1 Section B / Description
Planning and structuring Paper 1, Section B responses effectively
Revising and deploying effective descriptive features
Imagery, metaphor, five senses, synonym, semantic field, atmosphere

3. Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Recapping Descriptive Features
Descriptive Features
Metaphor
Simile
Personification
Juxtaposition
Pathetic Fallacy
Alliteration
Sibilance
Onomatopoeia
The five senses
Adjectives
Adverbs
Try to list as many descriptive features as possible, linked to the level of challenge below.
Top Challenge: Explain the effect / impact
Mid Challenge: Exemplify (give an example)
Low Challenge: Define it (what is it?)

4. Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Recapping Descriptive Features
Key Descriptive Features
Metaphor
Simile
Personification
Juxtaposition / Contrast
Pathetic Fallacy
Alliteration / Sibilance
Sibilance
Onomatopoeia
The five senses
Adjectives
Adverbs
Try to list as many descriptive features as possible, linked to the level of challenge below.
Top Challenge: Explain the effect / impact
Mid Challenge: Exemplify (give an example)
Low Challenge: Define it (what is it?)

5. Main Task 1: Working Through the Process
Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Main Task 1: Working Through the Process
A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing.
Write a description suggested by this picture.
Semantic Field: Words that link in terms of their meaning
Synonym: Words that mean the same

6. Main Task 1: Working Through the Process
Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Main Task 1: Working Through the Process
A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing.
Write a description suggested by this picture.
Semantic field:
Grey clouds
Stone
Grave
Bushes
Brown
Crumbling
Abandoned
Decaying
Isolated
Rocky
Closed

7. Main Task 1: Working Through the Process
Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Main Task 1: Working Through the Process
A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing.
Write a description suggested by this picture.
Semantic field:
Grey clouds
Stone
Grave
Bushes
Brown
Crumbling
Abandoned
Decaying
Isolated
Rocky
Closed

8. Main Task 1: Working Through the Process
Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Main Task 1: Working Through the Process
A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing.
Write a description suggested by this picture.
Semantic field:
Grey clouds
Stone
Grave
Bushes
Brown
Crumbling
Abandoned
Decaying
Isolated
Rocky
Closed
Sight: scrubby, yellow-brown
Smell: Dry, grassy, powdery

9. Main Task 1: Working Through the Process
Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Main Task 1: Working Through the Process
A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing.
Write a description suggested by this picture.
Semantic field:
Grey clouds
Stone
Grave
Bushes
Brown
Crumbling
Abandoned
Decaying
Isolated
Rocky
Closed
Sight: scrubby, yellow-brown
Smell: Dry, grassy, powdery
Feature: Simile
As untamed and wild as beard-hair.

10. Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
There’s a yellow-brown scrub of undergrowth outside the house, scruffy as an untended beard. It smells dry and powdery.
The leaves shiver as I pass, fallen ones crinkling below my toes like unwanted paper.

11. Main Task 2: Working Through the Process
Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Main Task 2: Working Through the Process
Paragraph 1:
Describe an overview of the setting.
If outside… start with the sky and then move downwards.
If inside… start with the sound.
Paragraph 2:
Zoom in on a key character or detail.
Try to include metaphors or similes, adjectives, adverbials and lists / triplets.
If character… use pre-prepared character section. Zoom backwards (their past?) and zoom forwards (their future?)
If detail… rely on the five senses AND think about what the detail means / represents. Why is it significant?
Paragraph 3:
Paragraph 4:
1 sentence paragraph… change the mood.
Use a semi-colon, be dramatic.
Keep the sentence short and declarative.
The mood changer can be an event, the weather, a character, a sound…
Paragraph 5:
Describe the impact of the mood changer.
Show a contrast to paragraphs 2 and 3. Use a contrasting semantic field! Use a metaphor or simile. Keeping linking in the five senses.
Paragraph 6:
Describe an overview of the setting again using phrases from the start.
Stand back and zoom out.
If the setting’s the same, have things coming full circle.
If the setting’s different/changed, describe the impact of the event and change.
A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing.
Write a description suggested by this picture.

12. Plenary: RAG-ing Myself (Paper 1, Section B
Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Plenary: RAG-ing Myself (Paper 1, Section B
Skill
RED, AMBER, GREEN (RAG)
Taking the image to bits
Annotating the image
Planning my response
Structuring my response
Understanding the features
Using the features
Using a wide vocabulary

13. Paper 1 Section B / Description
Today’s Date:
22 February 2019
Language P1, Question 5
Paper 1 Section B / Description
Planning and structuring Paper 1, Section B responses effectively
Revising and deploying effective descriptive features
Imagery, metaphor, five senses, synonym, semantic field, atmosphere