1. Practice of English Composition
영작문 연습
Prof. Shao Guangqing

2. Contents Unit 3 Narrative essays Part 3 Developing your ideas
Reading: A Scary Secret
Language focus: showing sequence
Part 4 Editing your writing
Reading: My Wedding
Language focus: past continuous
Editing a student paragraph

3. Part 3 Developing your ideas
Reading: A Scary Secret
Language focus
Time adverbs
Subordinating conjunctions

4. Reading: A Scary Secret
Read the essay.
What is the scary secret?
The scary secret is that the girls did not listen to their parents and were robbed when they went out.

5. Analyzing the student essay
Introduction
Hook:
Background information:
Thesis statement:
My sister and I made a dangerous mistake one summer.
age; place of the story; …
We had already decided to go out and explore this strange and beautiful city by ourselves.

6. Analyzing the student essay
Body paragraph
Description of the day:
Description of the robber:
down a narrow street, the sun was setting, the light was very beautiful, the noises of traffic nearby, the quiet little street.
he was short, he was wearing a dark green jacket and sunglasses, we could smell cigarettes and something terrible in his breath.

7. Analyzing the student essay
conclusion
The thing they learned:
They should obey their parents and be obedient daughters.

8. Time adverbs Subordinating conjunctions of time
Showing sequence
Time adverbs Subordinating conjunctions of time

9. Time adverbs Subordinating conjunctions of time

10. Time adverbs Subordinating conjunctions of time

11. Time adverbs Subordinating conjunctions of time

12. Language focus
In narrative essays, we use time expressions to make the chronological sequence of events clear.
Time adverbs: afterward, after that, later
eventually, finally, later on, now, then, suddenly…
Subordinating conjunctions: before, after
as soon as, when, while…

13. Practice: using subordinate conjunctions in time clauses
We went to the movies. We ate lunch at a restaurant. (after)
We went to the movies after we ate lunch at a restaurant.
We waited a long time for the bus. It arrived. (before)
We waited a long time for the bus before it arrived.
They saved enough money. They took a great vacation. (as soon as)
They took a great vacation as soon as they saved enough money.

14. Practice: using subordinate conjunctions in time clauses
I listened to the radio. I prepared dinner. (while)
I prepared dinner while I listened to the radio.
She worked very hard for many years. She retired. (then)
She worked very hard for many years, then she retired .
I was very surprised. You knocked on my door. (when)
I was very surprised when you knocked on my door.

15. Part 4 Editing your writing
Reading: My Wedding
Language focus: past continuous
Editing a student paragraph

16. Reading: My Wedding Identify background actions
Read the paragraph, and identify all the verbs that describe actions in progress or background actions

18. Reading: My Wedding describe background actions
Action verbs: Using the past continuous to describe background actions
The sun was shining, and the birds were singing.
Stative verbs: We use the simple past instead.
be, know, own, mean, seem, understand, love, believe,…

19. Practice: using the past continuous
When my uncle visited in 2004, I
________________________________
Last week was very busy, my roommate and I had many tests and assignments to complete. While I
_____________________________, my roommate
_______________________________.
was living in California.
was studying for our tests
was going to parties with her friends

20. Practice: using the past continuous
I’m sorry I couldn’t talk last night. When you called, we
_______________________________.
I’m so tired! Last night, my sister and I ____________________________
until two in the morning.
I didn’t hear the doorbell. The radio
_______________________too loudly.
were eating dinner
were playing video games
was playing

21. Practice: setting the scene with background details
It was an ordinary day at school. _________
________________________________
Suddenly, the fire alarm went off.
I was sitting
in class and trying to finish my homework. The
teacher was walking down the hallway. I was
shaking because I felt nervous. The teacher
came into the class and asked for our homework.
I was expecting to be in trouble.

22. Practice: setting the scene with background details
It was a cold and rainy night. ___________
________________________________
________________. And then someone knocked at the door.
My father and
mother were visiting relatives and away from
home. My sister and I were staying at home
alone. We turned on the TV, and they were
showing horror movies. The wind was blowing
and the rain was hitting the windows. We were
both feeling scared.

23. Practice: editing a paragraph
1. As soon as we arrived at our destination, the sun disappeared.
2. It was raining.
3. We were staying in a friend’s small apartment.
4. One day, while he was looking at the clouds, …
5. As soon as he saw the sun,
6. we jumped in the car.

24. Practice: editing a paragraph
7. However, while the tram was climbing, it became cloudy.
8. Our last day we went to the airport and then got on the plane.
9. Just as the plane was taking off, the sun began to shine again.

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