1. Narrative Writing #11

2. Action Help Brainstorming back of ambulance emergency room falling
the breaks aren’t working
vet picks up puppy
Help
accident
animal
child
alone
lost
life
Action
dog searching for owner
runs into burning building
quick take my hand
knows there is a problem
I cant breathe
screams
we’ve only got 10 seconds
trying to escape
everything looks the same
stuck in a cave
boat going the wrong way
trapped
no one knows where I am

3. Brainstorm again and think “action movie”
Happiness

4. Writing a better follow on sentence
Here are 6 strong techniques to make your writing fantastic….

5. Restate the sentence in other way
Describe an outstanding feature of the subject Or something unique about the subject
Restate the sentence in other way
Add more information about what you want to tell the reader
Explain what the character is thinking
Explain more about what the character is doing
Provide more detail on the setting Strunk, W (Revised 2011). The Elements of Style. USA: The Elements of Style Press.

6. 請描述關於主題的特色或其獨特之處。 請用別種方式重述句子 。 告訴讀者你想傳達的訊息是甚麼。 請說明主角人物的想法。
請說明主角人物要做些甚麼。
請提供多一些有關故事背景設定的細節。 Strunk, W (Revised 2011). The Elements of Style. USA: The Elements of Style Press.

7. Describe a feature
Staring at my reflection in the plane window, trying not to think of the past, I ponder the person waiting for me.
Would she like what she sees? I have changed a lot since she last saw me. No longer afraid of the water, I am the fittest I have ever been, swimming 10 kilometers every day. My strong shoulders and penetrating gaze are a real contrast to the man that she once referred to as childlike.

8. Describe a feature
Staring at my reflection in the plane window, trying not to think of the past, I ponder the person waiting for me.
Would she like what she sees? I have changed a lot since she last saw me, with the scars of a challenging lifestyle still visible, despite the plastic surgery. I suppose the knife wound running down my cheek is a part of me now.

9. Describe an outstanding feature of the subject
You Try – part 1 of 5
Describe an outstanding feature of the subject
The unknown soldier following me has done something unexpected, breaking his pattern, getting closer to his quarry, me.
Describe either yourself or the unknown soldier….

10. Describe an outstanding feature of the subject
You Try - 2
Describe an outstanding feature of the subject
“Why are you doing this?”
Describe one feature of the person

11. Describe an outstanding feature of the subject
You Try - 3
Describe an outstanding feature of the subject
Putting aside our past differences, I stared at my friend sitting opposite me.
Describe one feature of the person sitting opposite

12. Describe an outstanding feature of the subject
You Try - 4
Describe an outstanding feature of the subject
Physically drained, I can see the end, however my journey is only just beginning.
Describe one feature that you have

13. Describe an outstanding feature of the subject
You Try - 5
Describe an outstanding feature of the subject
A strong wind pushes against my body, but I keep climbing, knowing my training will ensure victory.
Describe one feature that you have

14. 1.Now thinking more quickly
Lesson
1.Now thinking more quickly
2. The follow on sentence _ describing a feature