1. Revision decisions
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2. Students decide the type of sentence, then fit the content to it.
They commit to the first choice and rarely revise sentences.

3. He suddenly began to speak, leaning forward, hot and feverish and yellow, upon the iron rail of the balcony.

4. He suddenly began to speak, leaning forward, hot and feverish and yellow, upon the iron rail of the balcony.
He began to speak.
He spoke suddenly.
He leant forward.
He leant on the balcony.
The balcony had an iron rail.
He was hot.
He was feverish.
He was yellow.
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5. Her head was tied in a kerchief. The kerchief was red
Her head was tied in a kerchief. The kerchief was red. Pieces of hair stuck out over her ears. The hair was short. The hair looked like dirty snow.

6. Her head was tied in a kerchief. The kerchief was red
Her head was tied in a kerchief. The kerchief was red. Pieces of hair stuck out over her ears. The hair was short. The hair looked like dirty snow.
Her head was tied in a dark- red kerchief, but pieces of hair, like dirty snow, quite short, stuck out over her ears.