1. Revising Personal Essay
“This I Believe”

2. Questions to Consider What is the purpose of the personal essay?
How can we communicate our beliefs more powerfully?

3. Revising Intros/Conclusions
Read your introduction. What strategy did you use? Label your introduction with a description of the strategy.
Now think of another intro technique you could use and write an alternative introduction. Label this new introduction with the strategy being used.
Which introduction do you like better? Why?
Read your conclusion. Have you connected your conclusion to your introduction? How? If yes, highlight the part in the conclusion and the part in the intro or earlier part of the essay that connect. Beside the conclusion, explain/label the connection. If no, revise your conclusion, adding a connection to an earlier part of the essay. Then, highlight and label.