1. AssESSMENT #2
T.E.A.L. ANALYTICAL ESSAY

2. Question 1
Choose three of the following symbols and analyse their symbolic importance:
Conch
Fire
Shelters
Sandcastles
Parachutist
Physical appearance of the boys (hair, face paint, clothing)
Beast
Piggy’s glasses
Ensure you discuss how this meaning changes over the course of the novel.

3. Question 2
2. William Golding successfully explores the theme of savagery in Lord of the Flies. Using detailed textual evidence, analyse how the author explores the boys’ descent into savagery through their appearance, actions and behavior (e.g. language or rituals) in the novel.

4. Due Dates Draft: P6 Wednesday 27 MARCH (Week 9) Final: P6 Wednesday 3 APRIL (Week 10)

5. ESSAY WRITING
TIPS

6. Essay Outline Introduction (100 words)
Brief summary of what the novel is about.
Mention the theme your essay will focus on
Outline what topics your next 3 paragraphs will deal with.
Write some sentences on why this theme is an important one throughout the novel - address the question
Body – 3 main paragraphs (600 words – 200 per paragraph)
3 T.E.A.L paragraphs
Ensure that the evidence part of the T.E.A.L paragraph has quotes from the novel
Conclusion (100 words)
Summarize your main points
Reiterate why the theme chosen is important and prevalent throughout the novel.

7. General rules for essays
William Golding’s novel “Lord of the Flies”
William Golding Lord of the Flies (italics = no quotation marks)
No personal pronouns – we, us, I, me
Simplify sentences if necessary to convey your point clearly – complicated sentences will not impress an examiner if they cannot be understood.

8. General rules for essays
Write your essay in the present tense
Capital Letters for characters names! – Pay attention to all spelling and grammar
Use formal language – don’t approach analytical essays casually.
Avoid using phrases such as: in this essay I will talk about; this essay will be about; in the next paragraph I will deal with etc.
Use analytical language and phrasing see following slides.

9. Introduction Rules Deborah Ellis “Parvana”
You must mention the author and book name
Definition – use words from the question to address the task
Interest – quote, statement, vocabulary etc.
Direction - outline 3 main points
Let’s take a look at a sample introduction and ask ourselves if all of these elements have been included. D I
DID I
DO?

10. Conclusion Rules
Reaffirm your view (position) – theme of courage is evident throughout…
Outline again your 3 main points in the order addressed.
If used, refer back to any quote used (a quote outside of the text)
Again, use words (or synonyms)/terms from the question to show you have addressed it.
Don’t introduce new material. If you have a new idea it should go in a paragraph on its own.
Don’t summarise: don’t list your topic sentences. It is repetitive and boring.
Don’t repeat ideas 
Do have interest (it’[s your last chance to impress the reader)
Have a powerful, thought provoking final sentence.

11. Sentence Structure In your essay, try to vary your sentence structure.
Jack is a very intimidating character when he wears the paint. He uses it to control the boys and make them follow his tribal rules. Jack sees the mask as a way of hiding. He is liberated of shame and doesn’t have to face his own savagery as a result.
Jack is amazed with the freedom and confidence that the paint gives him. He used it to intimidate others and wield control over his tribe.
Seduced by the power that lies within his grasps, Jack is overcome with the freedom and confidence given to him by the paint. Through intimidation and threats he wields control over his tribe.
Liberated of shame and self consciousness, Jack revels in the supremacy given to him by the paint. By using it he manages to intimidate others and influence their behaviour.

12. Evidence Conveys Depicts Demonstrates Illustrates Indicates Displays
Suggests
Expresses
Evokes
Communicates
Portrays
Represents
Reveals
Alludes
Reminds
Exemplifies
Shows *

13. Connectives Furthermore Moreover In addition Equally important Also
Besides
Further to this
Firstly, secondly , thirdly,
Gradually
However
Nevertheless
Nonetheless
On the contrary
Similarly
In the same way
For instance
As a result
Hence
Accordingly
As a consequence
Thus
Therefore
To this end
In the same manner
In contrast
In conclusion

14. Analytical Phrasing The suggestion here is that...
Use of the word ___________ conveys...
This demonstrates
This emphasises the fact that
This proves
This indicates
This describes how
This explains how
This persuades the reader to
This justifies
This suggests
Demonstrating that…
This implies…
The inference to be drawn from this is..
The implication being..
This would suggest..
The supposition drawn from this being that...
Leading to the supposition that…
The reader supposes...
It is clear, therefore, that...

15. T.E.A.L

16. Belief, argument, assertion, opinion, position
TEAL
Contention:
Belief, argument, assertion, opinion, position
T (Topic)
This sentence outlines what the central idea/point of your paragraph will be – your contention
It states what the main idea in/focus of your paragraph will be.
E (Explanation/Evidence)
At this level, this refers to the quotations that you utilise in your paragraph
A (Analysis)
This is the explanation of your evidence, conveying why your contention (point/topic) is valid.
Analysis is the detailing and developing of your argument/contention.
L: (Link)
The link refers to your ability to reinforce your main idea in the paragraph and…
Connect with the question so that it is clear you are addressing it.
Your analysis is where you have the chance to demonstrate your depth of knowledge and understanding of the underlying meaning of the text and your ability to articulate this in a sophisticated manner.

17. T: Within Golding’s novel, Lord of the Flies, the conch becomes an important symbol of authority, structure and democracy.
E: The boys revere whoever holds the conch and see it as the instrument associated with power and rules. Ralph uses it “to call an assembly” (pg. xx) and the boys immediately cling to the routine and organisation that his includes. Furthermore the conch becomes an instrument that represents fairness for all as “whoever holds the conch gets to speak.” (pg. xx)
A: Golding utilises the conch to depict the type of society that the boys have come from, one where everyone has the liberty to express themselves. In a civilized world people respect the right someone has to speak their mind. Many of the boys are seen to be
E: “cradling the great cream shell” (pg.44) during the assemblies and this signifies how they long to be ordered and civil and how they feel secure in a society that values all members. As a symbol of authority the
A: conch effectively influences the boys’ behaviour and makes them act in a courteous way towards one another. However as the group becomes more savage and uncivilized in their attitudes and actions the reader notices how the conch is described as
E/A: “fragile” (pg.222) which mirrors the boys’ ever weakening strength as a cooperating group. It reflects their society breaking down, the waning respect for a democratic society’s rules and order. The final striking image of the conch “(exploding) into a thousand white fragments and (ceasing) to exist” (pg.222) heralds the victory of savagery over civility, the triumph of evil over good. The conch begins as an emblem of equality and justice, concepts which fails to survive on the island, but finishes as another broken remnant of civilisation in the boys’ new lawless, chaotic and autocratic environment.
L: Golding uses the conch to represent all that is positive and ideal in an egalitarian society. Its journey from being revered to being destroyed mirrors the boys’ decline from order to anarchy.

18. Topic sentences Outline the main point of your paragraph Q.1
T: The conch is utilised by the author to represent the ideals of democracy and equality for all.
E: When the boys gather for assemblies it is accepted that “whoever hold the conch get’s to speak” (pg.xx).
A: This simple acceptance shows that the boys recognise the power of the object as an emblem of fairness and liberty. The use of the conch in their society guarantees that everyone has the opportunity to offer their opinion. It implies to readers that the power of the conch ensures organisation, respect for authority and a solid structure as to how influence is managed the boys conduct themselves in their new society.
E: Furthermore the author repeated use the verb “cradle” (pg.xx) when outlining how the boys treat the conch during assemblies.
A: This illustrates their respect for the conch and all that it embodies for them. It also reveals that the boys at this point believe it is precious, much like equality in a society and it is something that must be protected.
L: Therefore it is clear that the conch is a symbol of justice, a revered constitutional-like representation in the novel.

19. Topic sentences Outline the main point of your paragraph Q.2
T: The inner savage of these flawed young boys is revealed through their eagerness to engage in rituals and behaviour associated with primitive, tribal groups. Though at first reluctant, the boys actions denote their descent into savagery is inevitable.
E: painted faces A:
E: chanting and dancing
L: The civilities of their homeland, a structured and socially controlled place are no longer present to control the primitive urges of this group of boys. They, like all of mankind, are essentially savage and primeval impulses drive all their actions as the novel progresses.