1. The Consistency of Completing the Story(续写的衔接)
Vivan Zhang
From Cangnan Middle School
October 11th, 2017

2. 读后续写 评分原则 1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度； 2.内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；
3.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
4.上下文的连贯性。

3. The writing part should be consistent with first sentences.
续写与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度
The writing part should be consistent with first sentences.
☆ Each paragraph should be consistent with its first sentence.
☆The end of para. 1 should be consistent
with the first sentence of para. 2.
It should be consistent with the given text
in detailed facts
in theme
in personalities
in writing styles

4. Writing styles: to show vivid pictures
Jenny felt sick. She hated having to read aloud in class. She was sure everyone got really bored listening to her. Once … Lee was even looking at his watch, ….
He seemed so clever, and he had a certain sort of shining confidence.…Jenny sighed.
Jenny laughed with excitement. She walked across the room. She suddenly seemed to have a certain sort of confidence.
Writing styles:
to show vivid pictures

5. Is it consistent?
At that, Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to listen to Jenny’s speech first. Jenny walked slowly to the front.
She couldn’t think properly. All round her, a sea of faces was watching. She felt so frightened and the watch didn’t seem magical at all. Suddenly she saw Miss Walker’s encouraging eyes. Jenny took a deep breath. “I’m going to talk about swimming…” Ten minutes later the whole class stood up applauding Jenny’s wonderful speech. Jenny smiled as she eventually realized the real source of confidence.

6. At that, Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to listen to Jenny’s speech first. Jenny walked slowly to the front.
She couldn’t think properly. All round her, a sea of faces was watching. She felt so frightened and the watch didn’t seem magical at all. Suddenly she saw Miss Walker’s encouraging eyes. Jenny took a deep breath. “I’m going to talk about swimming…” Ten minutes later the whole class stood up applauding Jenny’s wonderful speech. Jenny smiled as she eventually realized the real source of confidence.

7. At that, Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to
Read text 1 and find sth. inconsistent.
At that, Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to
listen to Jenny’s speech first. Jenny looked at Miss
Walker and put on the watch. Then she started the
speech. Words just flooded out. With her confident
speech, the class were sure that the watch was magical. When the classmates were whispering, Miss Walker walked towards Jenny, rubbed her head and said, “The root of magic is not from the watch. It is your practice that bring you the confidence. ”
consistency in the theme & personalities

8. Read text 2 and find sth. inconsistent.
Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jenny, waiting for an explanation. “ I didn’t steal your watch. I just picked it up and didn’t know it was yours.” Jenny was embarrassed. “ Why don’t you return it to me now?” Lee asked angrily. “ Because it is magical. With its help, I can give a fluent speech. ” To her desperation, nobody answered her and there was a dead silence in the classroom.
consistency in the facts & writing styles
consistency between paragraphs ?
At that, Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to listen to Jenny’s speech first.

9. Jenny was very embarrassed. She said, “ I did not steal your watch. ”
Show a picture.
Jenny was very embarrassed. She said, “ I did not steal your watch. ”
Jenny’s face flushed bright red. “ I..I didn’t steal
you watch. “ Stuttered(结结巴巴地说）Jenny.
Jenny’s face turned scarlet with embarrassment. If only she could find a hole to hide in! She stood up automatically. Touching her nose, she gabbled(急促含糊地说）, “ I did not steal your watch.”
Consistency in writing styles: to show vivid pictures.

10. The Writing Given text First sentences
Make up a reasonable story, showing vivid pictures.
The Writing
theme
personalities
facts
writing styles
First
sentences
Given
text

11. A young and successful manager was traveling down a neighborhood street, going a bit too fast in his shining new car. He was watching for kids running out from between parked cars and slowed down when he thought he saw something.
As his car passed, one child appeared, and a brick hit the car hard. He instantly slammed on the brakes and turned around the car quickly back to the spot.
Para 1. Burning with anger, he jumped out of the car, __________________________________________
Para. 2 The boy pointed at a young man lying on the ground with a wheelchair nearby and pleaded(恳求）. ____________________________________________

12. Assignment
Finish your story, paying special attention to its consistency with the given text & first sentences.
Gather some vivid expressions to show feelings like anger, nervousness, excitement and so on.