1. Exercise 13

2. No.1
(Worse) A stipulation of the agreement is that the parties are in compliance with the rules .
(Better) The agreement stipulates that the parties comply with the rules.

3. No.2
(Worse) There is a general consensus among the board members that the proposal would be beneficial to the organizations.
(Better) The board members generally agree that the proposal would benefit the organizations.

4. [Note 4.7]
Depending on the sentence‘s context, correlate with, correspond to or confer with can be used as alternatives to agree when the Chinese meaning is 同意

5. No.3
(Worse) The underlying notion of the proposed procedure is the assumption that all factors are equal.
(Better) The proposed procedure assumes that all factors are equal.

6. No.4
(Worse) An attempt is made in this study to minimize the total cost.
(Better) This study attempts to minimize the total cost.

7. [Note 4.3]
To increase word variety in a sentence, attempts and aims can be used as alternatives to tries when the Chinese meaning is 嘗試.

8. No.5 (Worse) The proposed procedure is made up of many variables.
(Better) The proposed procedures consists (comprises) of many variables.

9. No.6 (Worse) Factor A is heavily dependent on Factor B.
(Better) Factor A heavily depends on Factor B.

10. [Note 4.9]
Depending on the sentence‘s context, relies on and, occasionally, hinges on can be used as alternatives to depends on when the Chinese meaning is 依賴 .

11. No.7
(Worse) The optimization approach provides an explanation of the large-scale problem.
(Better) The optimization approach explains the large-scale problem.

12. No.8
(Worse) A more feasible approach makes a determination of all of the variables.
(Better) A more feasible approach determines all of the variables.

13. No.9
(Worse) The following section provides recommendations on improvements to be made in the conventional design.
(Better) The following section recommends how to improve the conventional design.

14. No.10
(Worse) The purpose of this study is to more thoroughly understand the MCG problem.
(Better) This study attempts (aims) to more thoroughly understand the MCG problem.

15. No.11 (Worse) There is a requirement that all factors be considered.
(Better) All factors must be considered.

16. No.12
(Worse) A star configuration is comprised of a series of computers connected through a central point with a device known as a hub.
(Better) A star configuration comprises (consists) of a series of computers connected through a central point with a device known as a hub.

17. [Note 4.10]
Depending on the sentence‘s context, stronger verbs of consists of and comprises of are preferred to is made of or is comprised of on when the Chinese meaning is 由某物製作 而成 .