1. Peer editing thesis statement Outlining
10th World Studies
Turn in:
4 Source Cards
25 Note Cards
Take out:
Notecards
Device
Today’s objective:
I can use feedback to improve my writing, while also performing in-depth research!
Today’s Agenda:
Peer editing thesis statement
Outlining
HW:
TRS #4
Outline
2 hard copies on Monday!!!
1 submitted to TII.com by 7:24am

2. Steen’s “Issues” with Papers
Contractions:
DON’T do it…again, please DON’T DO IT!!!
Abbreviations:
Legit avoid this…TYT, and write it out! You’re not texting or tweeting, etc.

3. Steen’s “Issues” with Papers
Punctuation:
If you are wondering, please use tools in your word processing program and/or ask someone else…
Semicolons seem to be having a resurgence of popularity; however, very few writers know how to use semicolons correctly.
Conclusion:
“All in all,” “To sum it up,” “In conclusion,” etc. insult me…If you’re needing to do this, perhaps IDK what the purpose of your writing/message might be…

4. Peer Editing—Thesis
Is it written in academic language? (no slang, text language or punctuation, etc.)
Is it clear? Can you as a reader understand it without help from the author?
Does it answer Mr. Steen’s favorite question(s) of WHY, HOW, & SO WHAT?!?
Is it an argument? Can it be debated and proven?
Provide (kind, but useful) feedback…if it’s just “awesome!” that’s not terribly helpful…

5. The varying religions of the Stuart monarchs affected the social aspects and individual rights of the English society by constantly changing the laws.
what makes Louis the 14th an absolute monarch?
The daily lives for a peasant in the Renaissance was hell and was not a happy place to be. The corruption of the church negatively impacted the lives of people during Renaissance era.
Montesquieu's revolutionary ideas helped reshape France and Britain's government into more successful and proficient structures.
The French Revolution sparked from unrest within the people driven by high taxes, social society, and government which created great reform in France.
Absolute rulers like Louis XIV aided France in discovering the need for a monarchy.
The consequences of The Reign of Terror were Napoleon rising to power and wars with other nations.
The power that Louis XIV held, was extravagant and obvious to the people, with an extreme number of changes.
Galileo was one the most important figures in the Scientific Revolution. He was the first person to see the mountains on the moon, the spots on the sun, and and four moons of Jupiter all with a telescope.

6. ALL citations (Yes, including in-text) follow MLA formatting!
POINTS OF INTEREST
Directions!!!
12 Point, Times New Roman font!!!
Double-spaced, 1” Margin
ALL citations (Yes, including in-text) follow MLA formatting!
Help is available on the note card directions!
Here’s the link I recommend (provides examples for nearly every scenario):

7. OUTLINING
I would argue this might be the most important step in the writing process—while also being one of the most overlooked…
Template online
I like to use physical note cards in organizing it first…easier to “edit” by moving a card than typing…

8. OUTLINING Start with your thesis
Does it have layers? Lists? Complexity?
(it should…)
Can you categorize your evidence into topics?
Does it apply to your thesis in some way? (it should…)
Can you then create what we’ll term BTS—Body Thesis Statement?
Think of them as “mini theses…” or topic sentences…
Do all of these represent aspects or concepts consistent with my main thesis? (they must!!!)

9. Analysis
THEN, start adding in 2 sentence analysis…
Explains the significance of the evidence
Displays the correlation to the thesis
Huh?
WHAT is your evidence MEAN?
HOW does your evidence PROVE your thesis?

10. Analysis
When you’re done with your outline…
Read it in REVERSE order…
Yes, read it BACKWARDS…Steen will…
Does your analysis make sense in relation to your evidence? (it should…)
Does your evidence make sense in relation to your BTS? (it better…)
Do all your BTS make sense in relation to your main thesis? (they MUST!!!)