1. Interim 1 Feedback
My favorite mistakes 

2. Mistake #1: Lack of Capitalization
Don’t need to worry about capitalizing “I” since it shouldn’t be in your essay
No first or second person in the essay!
Names of people (proper nouns)!
Martin Luther
Names of races, languages, nationalities!
Spanish, European
Names of historical periods/events!
Slave Trade
Names of Places!
Africa

3. Mistake #2: Lack of Citations
Introduce and Cite your quotes…
According to Luther’s Table Talk, “…” (Document 15.1)
Equiano describes life on the boat by saying, “…” (Document ) or (Equiano, pg ___)
In the visual source 14.5c, one can see the way African slaves were dehumanized as they were referred to as “cargo”.

4. Mistake #3: Lack of Analysis
Explain the purpose, point of view, and reliability of the source/evidence – SOURCING
Explain how your evidence connects to other events/people/themes in history (time and space) – MAKING CONNECTIONS
Explain any significance or uncanny information (gaps, exaggerations, ignorance, context, etc.) in the evidence and how it relates to thesis - CLOSE READING/INQUIRY AND INFERENCE
Explain how your evidence corroborates (agrees and disagrees) with other sources especially in terms of answering the prompt (not just summarizing) – CORROBORATING
Explain how your evidence supports/proves/illustrates your argument – LINKS TO THESIS (MAKING THESIS CENTRAL)

5. Mistake #4: Misunderstandings
Prompt asks you to state who is responsible for the tragedy (the deaths, the conditions slaves lived and traveled in, etc.)
Africa established the trade for POWs and criminals
Muslims and then Europeans monopolized the trade and started to make agreements with African merchants to kidnap free citizens and even nobles
African Kings tried to speak out against it and re-negotiate terms with the Europeans…this did not work. (14.3 and 14.4) and discusses the treatment of slaves which is VERY different from how Europeans treated them.
While African Kings may be responsible for establishing the trade and inviting Europeans in, it is inaccurate to place sole responsibility on them without acknowledging Europe’s role.

6. Mistake #5: Not Turning in the Rough Draft!!
Those who were here Friday and didn’t turn it in…
Missed out on feedback to improve essay
Can still turn in the essay for credit Tuesday by midnight on Edmodo.
Those who were absent on Friday…
Can turn in a draft Monday by midnight on Edmodo and I can give feedback
Final draft is still due on Tuesday by midnight whether you get feedback or not

7. Edit and Revise – Use the Resource Wall!
Those of you with feedback
Read through it carefully!
Use the resource wall for to fix highlighted areas
Accuracy
Analysis
Technical
Structure
Style
If you still have questions, let me know.
Those of you without feedback, look at the Interim assignment from Friday and get to work on competing a final draft for Tuesday by midnight.