1. Session 11: Making revisions based on response groups
Concept: Revising and Editing a Memoir

2. Memoirists create a revision plan using a repertoire of decisions.
Teaching point
Copy in your NB:
Memoirists create a revision plan using a repertoire of decisions.

3. Let’s look quickly at my revised draft
Take a look at my Draft and my Revision Plan:
My process:
Wrote a draft
Got response group feedback
Made a revision plan
Revised my draft!
I will read you 3 things:
My Original Draft
My Response Group Feedback
My New Draft (with a Think-Aloud!)

4. Model revision plan, cont.
What do you notice is different from my first draft to my second draft?
What do you notice about my revision plan? What did I want to focus on?
Which comments from my response group do you notice I used?

5. Active engagement
Preparation Task: Reread your response group notes. Write a revision plan based on some, not all, of your notes. (use my handout if you need to!)
Turn-Read-and-Talk: Read the memoir draft and revision plan to a partner. Take turns commenting on, adding to, or changing the revision plans.

6. Active engagement, cont.
Let’s share 2 or 3 Revision Plans. Volunteers?
What are the most common types of revisions we see? Write these in your Writer’s Notebook.
Anything else you notice?

7. Independent practice
Mini-Task:
Now, apply the revision commitments you have made in your plan to the memoir-draft.
Annotate your revised draft by underlining, highlighting, and labeling the revisions.
I will come around to conference during this time

8. Turn and talk
With the same partner from earlier today, take turns reading your revised memoirs.
Listeners will point out an effective revision and explain how it impacted their understanding of the memoir.

9. Reflection
Copy in NB:
Reflection #11: Being a Reader—Listening to A Reader
What did you learn from responding to the writing of your classmate?
What did you notice in the writing of your classmate that helped you see your writing in a new way?

10. Homework Revise your memoir based on your Revision Plan.
Bring a new typed copy in Folder to our next class and STAPLE your Revision Plan to the back of it!