1. HONORS LANGUAGE AND COMPOSITION
Day 3

2. SAME SEATS AS THURSDAY PLEASE!

3. AGENDA
Warm-Up: Refresh our memories on Five Elements of Good Narrative and end of class discussion of culture
Quick Narrate
Description, Details, and Imagery Notes
Read p in Models for Writers
“The Corner Store” p. 402
Classroom Description Activity p. 405
Description Assignment Verbal Vomit
Grammar R1D2
HW: Connect to class on Turnitin.com, Description Assignment

4. Refresher The five essential features of good narration (372-4)
Establishing a clear context.
Choosing details well.
Organizing the narration logically.
Writing from an appropriate and consistent point of view.
Conveying a meaningful point or purpose.

5. Quick Narrate Prompt Review
For today, you were supposed to write about a time when you and at least one other person (although it could be a group of people, even a whole classroom of people) had a misunderstanding regarding culture. “Culture” might include one’s religion, background, race, beliefs, values, social habits, language, cuisine, and more.

6. Log-in to Classroom, and share your narration with a partner.
Of the five essential features of good narrative writing (refer back to your notes if you do not remember what they are), which one did your partner do best, and why? What area does he/she need to work on the most? Give him/her at least two specific tips on how to improve using the “Com

7. DESCRIPTION NOTES: DETAILS AND IMAGERY
Writers use details and imagery to contribute to descriptions within the personal narrative.
Details include
Facts
Observations
Incidents used to develop a subject and impart voice
The “naming” of something
(sick vs. flu) or even (flu vs. 102 degree fever)
Specific details refer to fewer things than general descriptions, thereby creating a precise mental picture.
Detail brings life and color to description, focusing the reader’s attention and bringing the reader into the scene.

8. DESCRIPTION NOTES: DETAILS AND IMAGERY
Imagery is the verbal representation of sensory experiences (sight, smell, taste, touch, sound)
Imagery USES detail, but if the details create an image (something that appeals to one of the five senses), it is considered imagery.

9. DESCRIPTION NOTES
Description is the creation of a verbal picture. It can make a person, place, thing, idea, or state of mind vividly concrete.
What is a dominant impression? A dominant impression is the single quality, mood, or atmosphere the writer wishes to emphasize.
How does the writer plan the order in which to present descriptive details? The pattern of organization (not to be confused with the patterns of development) must fit the subject of the description logically and naturally in an easy-to-follow way.

10. When do writers use description?
To establish a setting
To illustrate ideas
To help clarify a definition or comparison
To make the complexities of a process more understandable.
To show what something looked like, felt like, smelled like, etc.

11. DETAILS--WHAT TO INCLUDE AND WHAT TO EXCLUDE
You must first decide on the dominant impression, or overall feeling/idea you want your reader to leave with.
Any details included should help to create that impression.
Any details not dealing with the dominant impression should be excluded.
Why is correctly using detail so important?
If you include too many details, readers are distracted (they won’t know which details are important), confused (they will lose track of what your point is), or bored (they’ll get bogged down in the details and lose interest)
If you don’t include enough details, there will be no dominant impression; your reader will not get the feeling you want them to have because they will not be able to fully comprehend the idea you are presenting them

12. DESCRIPTION NOTES: “THE CORNER STORE”
Read “The Corner Store” (p. 402 – 405), taking note of Welty’s descriptions. How does her use of various types of imagery affect the dominant impression she gives of the store? Give at least three examples, and share your observations with your partner.

13. DESCRIPTION NOTES: “THE CORNER STORE”
Reread the final paragraph. Why did Welty include all of those details about Mr. Sessions instead of just saying, “Mr. Sessions cared about me and made me feel important even though we didn’t talk much”?

14. DESCRIPTION NOTES: “THE CORNER STORE”
Good use of details helps the writer show moods, thoughts, and emotions rather than simply trying to tell the reader about subtle and complex dynamics. That’s what the phrase “show, don’t tell” means.

15. DESCRIPTION ACTIVITY
Make a long list of the objects and people in the classroom as well as the physical features of the room—desks, windows, chalkboard, students, teacher, dirty walls, burned-out lightbulb, a clock that is always ten minutes fast, and so on.
Determine a dominant impression that you would like to create in describing the classroom. In other words, what do you want people to think about the classroom?
Now choose from your list those items that would best illustrate the dominant impression you have chosen. Be prepared to share out.

16. GRAMMAR ROUND 1, DAY 2
Cumulative Sentence: Sentence that completes the main idea at the beginning of the sentence, and then builds and adds on. (it accumulates more information as it goes)
You’ll love Casablanca if you’re the kind of person who likes to cry at movies.
Education has no equal in opening minds, instilling values, and creating opportunities.

17. Inverted sentence : a sentence where the verb comes before the subject
Inverted Sentences
Inverted sentence : a sentence where the verb comes before the subject
Running along the top of the wall were three very large, very filthy rats. (Instead of “Three very large, very filthy rats were running along the top of the wall.)
Down that lonely street walk the three angry boys.

18. Parallel Structure
Parallel Structure (Parallelism): Sentences or parts of sentences are parallel when structures within them take the same form. Parallelism is important at the level of the word, the phrase, and the clause.

19. Parallel words:
Chicago is home to many universities, museums, and libraries.
Parallel phrases:
Chicago is famous for housing the Sears Tower, publishing the Chicago Tribune, and hosting the Chicago Marathon.
 Parallel clauses:
Because the students loved reading and because the students loved writing, the students loved going to Ms. Simon’s Language and Composition class.
 Parallel sentences:
The students came. The students saw. The students conquered.

20. Homework Sign-up and/or connect to our class on Turnitin.com
1st period: Class ID: , Password: lmsa
3rd period: Class ID: , Password: lmsa
Revise and type-up your Quick Narrate based on your partner’s feedback and the scoring criteria (link on my page on LMSA website). Submit it on Turnitin.com. When you revise, also use your notes and include one sentence that utilizes one of the new forms we learned about today: cumulative sentence, inverted sentence, parallel structure. Underline or highlight this sentence so it is easy for me to find.