2. You will now work on improving your…….

3. VOICE
The
personal tone
that brings your
writing to life

4.                    
                           
                   
                                                                                                       
Marsha Chall

6. Pay close attention as you listen to the book
Up North at the Cabin
by Marsha Chall

8. * What direction is this place from where you live?
Up North at the Cabin
by Marsha Wilson Chall
* Think about a place you absolutely LOVE to visit:________________________________________
* What direction is this place from where you live?
Up North Down South Out East Out West
* Next, think of something special that happens on the way to this place:
On the way _______________________________
____________________________________________
* Now, think about how you feel at this special place and about the many things you do while there. Using your imagination think of the things that you’d like to pretend to be able to do really well while at this special place. Think about WHO you are at that moment in your special place!
I AM A ____________________________________   

9. I am the BRIGHT SUN What do I see? What do I hear? What do I feel?
smell?
What do I
taste?

11. I shut my eyes tight and fix them in my mind.
* You may choose to end your writing with a pattern similar to Marsha Chall in Up North at the Cabin as shown below or create your own ending to the story of the special place you LOVE to visit!!!
I shut my eyes tight and fix them in my mind.
So when I’m far away from _________________
When _________________________________
I close my eyes and once again I am ___________.

12. CATEGORY 4 3 2 1 Idea Hook Details Voice Conclusion Conventions
CATEGORY 4 3 2 1
Idea
The idea is clear, and well-focused idea.
The idea is reasonably clear.
The idea is limited/narrow.
The idea is unclear.
Hook
Grabs reader’s attention.
Summarizes your paragraph.
General or does not have anything to do with topic.
There is no clear hook.
Details
Many details with support
Few details with support
Details are general statements with no support
There are no details
Voice
The writer is writing from knowledge or experience and making it their own.
“From the Heart”
Fluent/Vivid
Lack of ownership of the idea.
Readable/Clear
The writer relates some of his own knowledge or experience, but it adds nothing to the idea.
Repetitive/Foggy
The writer ideas and the way they are expressed seem to belong to someone else.
Lack of Voice
Conclusion
The conclusion is strong and summarizes the idea.
The conclusion ties up almost all the loose ends.
The conclusion does not tie up the idea. l
There is no clear conclusion, the paper just ends.
Conventions
No errors distract the reader from comprehension.
Exceptionally easy to read.
Writer makes 1-2 errors that interfere with comprehension.
Easy to read.
Writer makes 3-4 errors that may interfere somewhat with readability but not with comprehension.
Errors interrupt the flow.
Writer makes more than 4 or more errors that interfere with readability and comprehension.
Errors greatly interrupt the flow.
Presentation
Paper is neatly written.
Obvious time and effort were given to make this piece your best
Paper is neatly written with 1 or 2 distracting corrections.
Some time and effort were given to this piece
The writing is generally readable, but the reader has to put forth a bit of effort to follow along.
Little time and effort were given to this piece
The writing is unreadable and the reader has to put forth a lot of effort to follow along.
Need to work on giving time and effort to your piece

13. On the way down south to Lake George I pass over the Adirondack Mountains. There are many crystal clear lakes along side the road.
At Lake George, I am the bright sun. I hear the laughter of children playing on the beach. The taste of clouds brushing by me is so sweet. The heat of my body is intense. The smell of sun block fills my nose. The seagulls pass by me and the fish swim below.