1. How to Insert a Concrete Detail

2. The Jane Schaffer Writing Model
TS-Blue (Underline)-Develop the answer to the question where GTA and Main Idea are stated. CD-Red (Circle)-Cite a piece of textual evidence/concrete detail from the text to support your answer. CM-Green (Box)-Explain your thinking and the concrete detail in two sentences. CS-Black (None)-Restate your TS and add a global connection that is personal.

3. Why do I need to cite textual evidence/concrete detail?
1. Make an argument stronger 2. Shows the writer’s understanding of the reading

4. How do I insert a concrete detail/textual evidence in my writing?
With sentence starters as follows:
On page ___, it says, “______.”
The author writes, “____” (pg.___, par. ___).
In the text it says, “_____” (pg.__,par. ___).
For example, on page ___, it states, “____.”

5. How do I begin the commentary sentence?
With the sentence starters as follows:
This quotes shows…
This proves that…
Based on this example, it demonstrates…
This means that…

6. Mrs. Rubal’s example of a Jane Schaffer Writing Model based on Eugenia Collier’s short narrative “Marigolds” (Pg.27)
In Eugenia Collier’s short fictional narrative “Marigolds,” Lizabeth begins with a careless and violent voice but ends up with a mature and wise voice through the author’s use of diction and imagery. For example, the text states, “poverty was the cage in which we were trapped” (pg.20, par.28). This quote shows the imagery of being trapped in a cage suggests Lizabeth and her entire shantytown feel powerless, confined, and immobile. In addition, the strong diction of “trapped in a cage” suggests that Lizabeth and the people in her community are like birds that are unable to fly and thus cannot be free, free from poverty. In conclusion, because Lizabeth develops an understanding of her “cage,” she’s able to mature and become wise and part ways from her careless and violent persona, so that she can finally be free from the “cage” of poverty that confines her in her coming-of-age years.

7. Read the passage that follows…
Called “Adopt, Don’t Shop”

8. Around 2.7 million adoptable dogs and cats are euthanized each year in the United States simply because too few people are willing to adopt from shelters. The number of euthanized animals could be reduced dramatically if more people adopted pets instead of buying them. By adopting from a private humane society or animal shelter and rescue groups, you’ll help save the lives of two animals—the pet you adopt and a homeless animal somewhere that can be rescued because of the space you helped free up. Furthermore, adopting a pet from an animal shelter or a shelter group is much less expensive than buying a pet at a pet store. In addition, animals from many shelters are already spayed or neutered and vaccinated, which makes the shelter’s fee a real bargain. By adopting instead of buying a pet, you can also be certain you aren’t supporting cruel puppy mills with your money. Puppy mills will continue to operate until people stop purchasing from them. Instead of buying a pet, visit your local shelter or contact a local rescue group, where you will likely to find dozens of healthy, well-socialized puppies, kittens, and adult pets—including purebreds—just waiting for that special home—yours.

9. Question!!!
1. Based on the passage “Adopt, Don’t Shop,” what is the author’s purpose?

10. Mrs. Rubal’s Jane Schaffer Paragraph Response on “Adopt, Don’t Shop” Question
Based on the passage “Adopt, Don’t Shop,” the author’s purpose is to convince people to adopt a pet from a shelter or a rescue group instead of buying it from a pet store. The author states, “Around 2.7 million adoptable dogs and cats are euthanized each year in the United States simply because too few people are willing to adopt from shelters.” This piece of evidence shows that too many dogs and cats die each year because we are unwilling to change our ways of getting pets. Furthermore, this quote helps people become aware of the large number of animals that potentially could be saved, which evokes a strong emotion of sympathy within people towards animals. In summary, the author tries to persuade Americans to get dogs and cats from animal shelters and rescue groups instead of from the pet stores, and by doing so, we all will help save them from being euthanized.