1. Please have your RAW book on your desk.
Friday, 9.25 and Monday, 9.28
Please have your RAW book on your desk.

2. Today’s Agenda Stamp Memoir Brainstorm Review of editing errors
Playing with Syntax/Examples and Your Own Sentences
Writing with Details
Tips and Reminders about essays

3. Writing Tips . . . It’s a brutal world.
When you don’t use correct grammar and punctuation, it’s difficult to take you seriously.
Correct the following mistakes on a clean page in your spiral however you see fit.

4. Fix ‘em!
Mrs. Ault went to the grocery store, she needed to buy a cane for support. 
 Mrs. Ault works at austin high school and wants her students to learn to capitalize stuff and make it sound good and stuff.
 I think that learning new things is a good way to challenge yourself i like to learn and be the bestest student eva!!!!!!

5. Sentence Variety
Writing all your sentences the SAME way every time will make the reader cry, scream, or even projectile vomit on your essay.
Practice writing sentences using the following starting strategies to prevent these issues.

6. Sentence Variety Prepositional Phrase Noun Gerund Before she left...
After the crash...
Noun
School is the place where...
Gerund
Swimming gives me freedom...
Eating this cake...

7. Sentence Variety Absolute Phrase
"At a right angle to the school was the back of the church, its bricks painted the color of dried blood." (Pete Hamill, A Drinking Life, 1994)

8. Sentence Variety Infinitive Phrase: (begins with “to”)
To get through the day without murdering any students, was Mrs. Ault’s pure goal.

9. Sentence Variety Another suggestion, is to vary your sentence length.
“It can be very effective to have a long, descriptive sentence with lots of details to get your reader in a rhythm. Then drop a short one. When done well, this can be helpful in keeping your reader moving on within the passage without them knowing it. You’re so sneaky.”

10. More Syntax Practice I am going give you three numbers.
In your RAW book using your syntax handout, write an original sentence following the sentence structure of your assigned number.
Thanks in advance for sharing your creations!

11. Writing Prescriptions
I’m not a doctor, but I giving you a prescription…to create healthy sentences! (Did you get my joke? Huh? Huh?)
Follow the assigned prescription to write short paragraph about a subject of your choice (check out my example about Evan for help!)

12. Details Paragraph
With your partner, rewrite the rather lackluster, boring paragraphs to make each more interesting through diction and detail choices.

13. Final Draft Checklist Write in first person (“I”) Avoid “you”!
Write in multiple paragraphs
Begin in an interesting way
Use imagery to “show” rather than “tell”
Develop the memory to include beginning, middle, and end
Focus on one event
Develop the memory to show how the experience impacted you
Show the emotions of the experience

14. Optional Style Techniques
Dialogue
Creative and meaningful sentence structures (like one word sentences)
Foreshadowing (“I knew the day was only going to get worse when I saw her staring at me.”)
Flashback
Metaphor or simile (think “Tomatoes and Onions”)
A relevant foreign language or slang