1. Writing the College Application Essay
Tips from the College Board

2. Keep your focus narrow and personal
Prove one single point or thesis throughout
Do not tell the committee what you’ve done; they will read your application’s list. Instead SHOW THEM WHO YOU ARE.
You can’t be too comprehensive in your limited space; instead choose a narrow focus and stick to it.

3. Prove your main idea. Use VIVID facts.
Ho hum: "I like to be surrounded by people with a variety of backgrounds and interests."
Better: "During that night, I sang the theme song from Casablanca with a baseball coach who thinks he's Bogie, discussed Marxism with a little old lady, and heard more than I ever wanted to know about some woman's gall bladder operation."

4. Prove it even more!
Use SPECIFIC facts. Avoid clichéd, generic, and predictable writing by using vivid and specific facts.
Ho hum:  "I want to help people. I have gotten so much out of life through the love and guidance of my family, I feel that many individuals have not been as fortunate; therefore, I would like to expand the lives of others."
Better: "My Mom and Dad stood on plenty of sidelines until their shoes filled with water, or their fingers turned white, or somebody's golden retriever signed his name on their coats in mud. That kind of commitment is what I'd like to bring to working with fourth-graders."

5. DON’T TELL THEM WHAT YOU THINK THEY WANT TO HEAR!

6. Most admission officers read plenty of essays about the charms of their university, the evils of terrorism, and the personal commitment involved in being a doctor. Bring something new to the table, not just what you think they want to hear.

7. Don’t include information found elsewhere in the application.
Don’t Write a Resume
Don’t include information found elsewhere in the application.
Your essay will end up sounding like an autobiography, travelogue, or laundry list.
Yawn.

8. Don’t use 50 words when 5 will do.
Be concise: Eliminate unnecessary words.
Using active voice will help you write concisely and powerfully.
Remember: you have limited space; use it wisely!

9. Ho hum: "Over the years it has been pointed out to me by my parents, friends, and teachers -- and I have even noticed this about myself, as well-- that I am not the neatest person in the world.“
Better: “I am a slob.”

10. Remember Have a focus. Be concise.
Vary sentence structure and vocabulary.
Use active voice.
Be vivid and concrete.
Let your voice come through.
Do not repeat information from your application.

11. University of Wisconsin topic
The University values an educational environment that provides all members of the campus community with opportunities to grow and develop intellectually, personally, culturally, and socially. In order to give us a more complete picture of you as an individual, please tell us about the particular life experiences, perspectives, talents, commitments and/or interests you will bring to our campus. In other words, how will your presence enrich our community?