1. Exercise 14

2. No.1  (Worse) Yum and Ko made a recommendation of starting with Taguchi ’ s two-step procedure and that the transformation be applied in case (C1) is not satisfied.  (Better) Yum and Ko recommended starting with Taguchi ’ s two-step procedure and applied the transformation in case (C1) is not satisfied.

3. [Note 4.14]  Avoid wordiness by saying if instead of in case.

4. No.2  (Worse) The factors are in some cases identified, estimated, and easy for implementation.  (Better) The factors are in some cases identified, estimated, and easily implemented.

5. [Note 4.15]  Avoid wordiness by saying occasionally instead of in some cases.

6. No.3  (Worse) Either the design factor should be examined or implementation of the two-step procedure should not be made.  (Better) Either the design factor should be examined or the two-step procedure should not be implemented.

7. No.4  (Worse) The proposed procedure is simpler than conventional methods and analyzes an experiment with singly censored data.  (Better 1) Simpler than conventional methods, the proposed procedure analyzes an experiment with singly censored data.  (Better 2) The proposed procedure, simpler than conventional methods, analyzes an experiment with singly censored data.

8. No.4 (cont.)  (Better 3) The proposed procedure is simpler than conventional methods because it analyzes an experiment with singly censored data.

9. No.5  (Worse) The Maximum likelihood method is not only frequently used by statisticians, but also those having limited statistical training find it difficult to comprehend.  (Better) The Maximum likelihood method is not only frequently used by statisticians, but also difficult to comprehend for those having limited statistical training.

10. No.6  (Worse) Transforming the relative importance of each response into a fuzzy number consist of the following steps: (a) Express the relative importance of each response by a linguistic term. (b) A formal scale system is established that can convert linguistic terms into their corresponding fuzzy numbers. (c) A conversion scale is found that matched all of the linguistic terms.

11. No.6  (Better) Transforming the relative importance of each response into a fuzzy number consist of the following steps: (a) Express the relative importance of each response by a linguistic term. (b) Establish a formal scale system that can convert linguistic terms into their corresponding fuzzy numbers. (c) Find a conversion scale that matched all of the linguistic terms.

12. No.7  (Worse) The numerical example concentrates mainly on illustration of the cases derived in the previous section and demonstrating the effectiveness of the proposed model.  (Better) The numerical example illustrates the cases derived in the previous section and demonstrates the effectiveness of the proposed model.

13. No.8  (Worse) The most frequent issues encountered in multi-response problems are resolving the conflict among responses, dealing with a different measurement unit for each response, and to assign a set of weights to the current information about the relative response of each problem.

14. No.8  (Better) The most frequent issues encountered in multi-response problems are resolving the conflict among responses, dealing with a different measurement unit for each response, and assigning a set of weights to the current information about the relative response of each problem.

15. [Note 4.16]  Depending on the sentence ’ s context, regarding, concerning, or involving can be used as alternatives to about when the Chinese meaning is 關於.

16. No.9  (Worse) The two responses can be optimized on the basis of determination of the optimal settings for factors B, C, D, E, F and G and to set factor A at level 1 and to set factor H at level 3.  (Better) The two responses can be optimized on the basis of determining the optimal settings for factors B, C, D, E, F and G, while setting factor A at level 1 and factor H at level 3.

17. [Note 4.17]  Avoid wordiness by saying by, from or because instead of on the basis of. In this sentence, by is the logical substitute.

18. No.10  (Worse) The committee made a decision to set a new agenda and that the meeting should be adjourned.  (Better) The committee decided to set a new agenda and adjourn the meeting.

19. No.11  (Worse) The robust design focuses not only on collecting data accumulated from the designed experiment, but also that the results obtained by using Taguchi ’ s two-step procedure are compared.  (Better) The robust design focuses not only on collecting data accumulated from the designed experiment, but also on comparing the results obtained by using Taguchi ’ s Two-step procedure.

20. [Note 4.18]  Depending on the sentence ’ s context, accumulating and gathering can be used as an alternatives to collecting when the Chinese meaning is 蒐集.

21. No.12  (Worse) The proposed project is promising, creative, and has innovative ideas.  (Better) The proposed project is promising, creative, and innovative.